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Old 28-09-2012, 22:14
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I値l not cry there, weep like a fool.
I値l walk out quick and be all cool.
Hardly lowering the tone, Patsy. That will strike a chord with every mother - and it's only the beginning. There's lots more ahead.
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Old 29-09-2012, 05:34
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I'd better stop there as I don't want to be the reason the poetry thread gets closed.
God forbid Biz

I know the script, I値l mark the rule.
I値l not cry there, weep like a fool.
Patsy - welcome back I enjoyed this poem, I never really thought about the parent's viewpoint on the occasion. You put all the mixed emotions across really well
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Old 29-09-2012, 14:07
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U-boat nerves

Curse this tin we're trapped in,
Damn these metal walls,
I observe the Captain,
From work he won稚 pause
Till victory is gained at sea
To help the Nazi cause.

I was a believer,
None loved Hitler more
Until cabin fever
Gripped my nerves and bore
Into my head and now I dread
Each passing day of war.

Claustrophobic feeling,
Tension makes me sweat,
Steel hatch, floor and ceiling
Dominate and yet
Sometimes at night in dreams I sight
The home I can稚 forget.

If a depth charge follows
Then hits our machine
As the ocean swallows,
Sinking the machine
With fear I値l dwell pulled down to hell
Chained to a submarine.

Heading for collision,
In the dark we値l grope,
What use then the vision
Of the periscope?
The seabed rocks will smash this box
And shatter every hope. 


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Old 29-09-2012, 21:04
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What a nightmare. I don't think I'd even have the nerve to descend into a submarine, even if the hatches weren't closed.

Brave men indeed.

Having said that I've no love for the ones who torpedoed our ships.
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Old 29-09-2012, 21:21
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Having said that I've no love for the ones who torpedoed our ships.
Agreed Biz. Sometimes it's interesting to write from the German point of view I find.
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Old 29-09-2012, 21:23
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I couldn't concentrate

Watched a film and noticed how I couldn稚 concentrate
On the Brighton black and white as gangsters peddled hate,
Mr Kolly Kibber met a boy who didn稚 care,
Lost his life to Pinkie in the ghost train at the fair.

Still I couldn稚 concentrate (I知 sorry Graham Greene),
So I chose a record, pressing play on the machine
Started Kate Bush singing and I soon began to drowse
Till my dreams were being stirred by her repeated wows.

Then I tried to read my book, at chapter twenty-four
I壇 left absorbing stories of the English Civil War
But I couldn稚 concentrate on Cromwell or the King;
The mind is such a wayward, free and independent thing.


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Old 29-09-2012, 22:13
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Posted this one elsewhere on GD, but the thread got locked and I like to keep my stuff here so I can find them (if I ever finish that software).

Taboo.

Oh we're all so fine
as we wait in line
to use our rights.
Who's in our sights?

Aren't we just great
as we tell it straight
from the the horses arse -
for the sake of farce.

Are we that dim
to go out on a limb
when we know it offends?
That's not how to make friends.

Just what's the point.
Must freedom anoint
like it's some kind of race?
Man's further disgrace.
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Old 30-09-2012, 07:05
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Taboo.

Are we that dim
to go out on a limb
when we know it offends?
That's not how to make friends.
The poem seems to accurately pinpoint debates on DS Archiver. I find most of them get spoiled by intolerance and nastiness. Thank god for IPaDA, an oasis of calm
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Old 30-09-2012, 17:35
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One more for the IPAD - A.
A haiku.

Pregnant are the oaks
Bearing little acorn buds
Nature's mid-wives buzz
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Old 30-09-2012, 18:42
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Pregnant are the oaks
Bearing little acorn buds
Nature's mid-wives buzz
Love it Frank
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Old 01-10-2012, 00:59
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The poem seems to accurately pinpoint debates on DS Archiver. I find most of them get spoiled by intolerance and nastiness. Thank god for IPaDA, an oasis of calm
Well I always thought you created the thread.

Rambling Inheritance.

A friend without need
is the rarest of breed.

Behind Family in the queue,
the others, so many,
have plans a plenty
to get what they can out of you.

To be taken for granted
here in the enchanted
world of a thousand lies.
And then sell you up river
and you, all a quiver,
amend your will. Surprise!

Well count me out Baby.
I've been thinking maybe
I like the ocean more
than great auntie Mabel's
antique tables.
I'm dreaming of waves on shore.

Keep your old barren acres
and pictures of makers
and dusty old ancient books.
Just give me a boat
and a poem un-wrote
and a line of feathered hooks.
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Old 01-10-2012, 03:19
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Well I always thought you created the thread.

Rambling Inheritance.

Just give me a boat
and a poem un-wrote
and a line of feathered hooks.
I did start this place but I never think of it as my thread, it's always ours

I love Rambling Inheritance Archiver. It tells a great story - someone rejecting the material benefits of a will for the simple things in life like angling and enjoying the sea
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Old 01-10-2012, 03:27
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Wish I could write poetry, I'm not articulate though
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Old 01-10-2012, 04:38
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Wish I could write poetry, I'm not articulate though
Aaw - never mind Christina I hope you enjoy reading the poetry here
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Old 01-10-2012, 06:54
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Aaw - never mind Christina I hope you enjoy reading the poetry here
I do, thank you
Ive tried reading Dante lately, its quite challenging
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Old 01-10-2012, 08:35
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Ive tried reading Dante lately, its quite challenging
I've never read any Dante but I know he was a big influence on artists like Blake and Rossetti.
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Old 01-10-2012, 09:43
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Rambling Inheritance.

A friend without need
is the rarest of breed.
.............................
Just give me a boat
How true Archiver. The only problem being the cost of that boat etc. Hmmm. A friend in need?

I did start this place but I never think of it as my thread, it's always ours
Ah, but you see, if you weren't so prolific, the thread would get lost in the mists.

Wish I could write poetry, I'm not articulate though
You aren't alone Christina. However, don't let that stop you joining in and making comments. You'd be very welcome.
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Old 01-10-2012, 12:35
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thanks Musty. Re. Brighton Rock thought it was about its beach ho ho. Loved the film (Attenboro') never read it though.
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Old 01-10-2012, 16:03
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I love Rambling Inheritance Archiver. It tells a great story - someone rejecting the material benefits of a will for the simple things in life like angling and enjoying the sea
How true Archiver. The only problem being the cost of that boat etc. Hmmm. A friend in need?
Thanks both. Spot on. I also liked how the last line 'a line of feathered hooks' may be applied to a good line of poetry.

(...and I'll bloody do it one day. You can't live near the sea for long without always wanting to return. I love Kernow. )
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Old 01-10-2012, 16:28
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I also liked how the last line 'a line of feathered hooks' may be applied to a good line of poetry.
Funnily enough when I first read that line, I imagined a line of birds perched on a rail or rigging, waiting for a fish to emerge.

Interpretation is what you make it.
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Old 01-10-2012, 20:06
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Ah, but you see, if you weren't so prolific, the thread would get lost in the mists.
I'm still reposting oldies mainly Biz but I couldn't concentrate was a new poem

thanks Musty. Re. Brighton Rock thought it was about its beach ho ho. Loved the film (Attenboro') never read it though.
It's a good book, I recommend it Frank

Thanks both. Spot on. I also liked how the last line 'a line of feathered hooks' may be applied to a good line of poetry.

(...and I'll bloody do it one day. You can't live near the sea for long without always wanting to return. I love Kernow. )
I liked that line too. I love the sea as well Archiver, I must be due for another visit soon
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Old 01-10-2012, 20:29
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I'm still reposting oldies mainly Biz but I couldn't concentrate was a new poem
I do recognize some of them, however as I've said before, good poetry is meant to be read over and over again.

I've had many a day when "I couldn't concentrate".
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Old 01-10-2012, 22:05
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I called a meeting of my forum,
namely me as I attend it alone,
nominally completing a quorum;
my rules OK, my ball, my zone.

I am going to hold a referendum
to judge what I'm having for tea;
big decision made by little old me,
doctor's orders? Sure to bend'em,
with meet quantum of autocracy.

Frazzle bacon, pile up for me fries,
guzzleworthy but no doubt unwise;
it's all down to voters' rights alright,
majority favours rich meats tonight.
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Old 03-10-2012, 02:27
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I've had many a day when "I couldn't concentrate".
It's easily done

Frazzle bacon, pile up for me fries,
guzzleworthy but no doubt unwise;
it's all down to voters' rights alright,
majority favours rich meats tonight.
Even as a non-meat eater this made my mouth water Frank
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Old 03-10-2012, 17:34
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AUTUMN

Almanac's pages flip ever over,
Usual green leaves now copper,
Trees' great end of season show
Ushers in the year's latest new line;
Models a motley panoply of colour,
Nature's procession, in its fashion.
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