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Old 18-07-2011, 04:31
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Absolutely stunning poem Musty, defo one of your best to date.

I detect parallels with Edgar Allan Poe in some of your darker poems.
Thanks Troy Every so often I like to write a horror poem. Despite their beauty, I find certain parts of rural Britain make the perfect setting for these. Films such as Straw Dogs and The Wicker Man have probably led me in that direction.
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Old 18-07-2011, 09:32
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the girl in the polka-dot dress

Farewell brother Bobby,
It's hard to reverse
Your fate and if there is a reason
For wrongs there are none for the Kennedy curse
Save that which we classify treason.

Ambassador Hotel,
The chaos and screams,
The murder that came without warning
To shatter remaining American dreams
And signal a colder age dawning.

'We shot him! We shot him!'
A couple declared
On exit stairs fleeing ecstatic,
When somebody asked who they'd shot, unimpaired
The words uttered next were emphatic:

'Senator Kennedy!'
She claimed the fact
While barely disguising elation,
They weren't apprehended but certainly cracked
A dynasty's chance of duration.

The pair simply vanished,
When justice has died
The truth can be played like a fiddle,
The girl in the polka-dot dress who replied
Left us with an unanswered riddle.

Remembering Bobby
My sorrow takes hold,
Despite all his worldly successes
I think of a hero that never grew old
And girls who where polka-dot dresses.


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Old 18-07-2011, 10:27
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That was a shocking sight Musty. I hadn't heard that there was a girl involved. I loved my polka-dot dresses.
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Old 18-07-2011, 13:04
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That was a shocking sight Musty. I hadn't heard that there was a girl involved. I loved my polka-dot dresses.
Indeed Biz - 'the girl in the polka-dot dress' and her male accomplice were never traced. A police report did go out on them at the time, but to no avail.

Tsk, I misspelt 'wear' in the last line
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Old 18-07-2011, 17:18
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Indeed Biz - 'the girl in the polka-dot dress' and her male accomplice were never traced. A police report did go out on them at the time, but to no avail.

Tsk, I misspelt 'wear' in the last line
We all make mistakes.

I've just been reading up on JFK Musty and I remember the Lee Harvey Oswald problem, but I think it must have fallen out of the news after that, or I was engrossed in other things at the time.
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Old 18-07-2011, 17:32
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Brilliant write about one of my all time heroes as well Musty.

Well worth the wait (I'd been biting my fingernails in anticipation)

I really admired RFK and his courage, intelligence and compassion; a wonderful human being in my book.

And there are several contradictions and questions in his assassination.

His favourite poet was Aeschylus apparently.

Incidentally Musty, three of the four kittens went to excellent homes today so although sad at them leaving, I'm very pleased with their new owners.

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Old 18-07-2011, 18:58
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I've just been reading up on JFK Musty and I remember the Lee Harvey Oswald problem, but I think it must have fallen out of the news after that, or I was engrossed in other things at the time.
Bobby's assassination hasn't received as much publicity as his brother Jack's over the years Biz. Most people have heard of the grassy knoll, but not the girl in the polka-dot dress.
Brilliant write about one of my all time heroes as well Musty.

I really admired RFK and his courage, intelligence and compassion; a wonderful human being in my book.
Thanks Troy I believe the Kennedy brothers and Martin Luther King were all felled by conspiracies. Blaming their deaths on 'lone nuts' was a convenient way of hiding the truth.

Well done with the kittens BTW
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Old 18-07-2011, 19:15
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Bobby's assassination hasn't received as much publicity as his brother Jack's over the years Biz. Most people have heard of the grassy knoll, but not the girl in the polka-dot dress.
Oops, I read that wrong. I was right, we all make mistakes. I imagined it was Jack saying farewell to Bobby, and thought the couple had fired out of a window. I was thinking Bobby died at Chapaquidick, but I've just checked and of course, that was a scandal involving Ted.

Rereading the poem, I can see that having decided it was Jack, and wasn't surprised that I'd never heard about the Ambassador Hotel.

Sorry, I'll pay closer attention in future - I clearly didn't pay much attention when Bobby died either.
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Old 18-07-2011, 19:34
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Rereading the poem, I can see that having decided it was Jack, and wasn't surprised that I'd never heard about the Ambassador Hotel.
There's no doubt that Sirhan Sirhan murdered Bobby Kennedy at the Ambassador Hotel, but he also said he met a girl before the assassination. Whether it was the polka-dot dress girl is unclear. Either way, the fleeing couple who shouted 'We shot him, we shot him' contradict the official lone killer version.
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Old 18-07-2011, 19:51
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at the harbour

Being at the harbour
Where these boats are moored
Brings me satisfaction,
Here I feel restored.

Either in sea breezes
Or a stormy blast
I regard each vessel,
Rigging, deck and mast.

Though it can't be proven
There must be some cause
Why the ghosts of sailors
Live in harbour walls.

Just like Otis Redding
I while time away
Knowing what awaits at
My dock of the bay;

Quayside lanterns glowing,
Gulls above that cry,
Dark the lonely ocean,
Wide the evening sky.

Only at this harbour
Where old ships survive
And the tide laps gentle
Do I come alive.


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Old 18-07-2011, 23:02
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Magnificent imagery Musty.

It really hits the spot with me; something about the seaside that I find captivating.

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Old 19-07-2011, 05:44
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Ta Troy I share your love of the seaside - even in bad weather our coastal resorts seem full of atmosphere.
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Old 19-07-2011, 15:50
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B second of the alphabet

May be in actualité supreme.

Eh? You may say and yet

To be is the ultimate.

B heads the future's dream

Of every baby,

Encapsulate in maybes;

What more may there be ...

Some such as the:

Beatitudes sacred to some,

BS's most politicians' sum,

Beatles' final "Let It Be"...

What 2b next from me

In the ABC? You'll see.
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Old 19-07-2011, 15:54
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Too much information
making my head spin.
Murdoch's empire crumbles
but I prefer apple crumbles.
stop electronic news overload
and curl up with a good book instead.
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Old 19-07-2011, 17:21
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Lovely Musty.

B second of the alphabet
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Wow! You've got a lot of work ahead of you before you reach z Frank.

Too much information
making my head spin.
Murdoch's empire crumbles
but I prefer apple crumbles.
stop electronic news overload
and curl up with a good book instead.
Oh! I agree with every word spiney.
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Old 20-07-2011, 09:00
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What 2b next from me

In the ABC? You'll see.
Another entertaining alphabetical ode Frank
Murdoch's empire crumbles
but I prefer apple crumbles.
Nice one Spiney. I thought the Dirty Digger seemed forgetful yesterday, but I hated it when that idiot custard pied him
Lovely Musty.
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Old 20-07-2011, 10:35
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Great Pyramid

Among the sands
Of Egypt's lands
On Giza stands
A vast
Unmoving store
Of ancient law
Forevermore
To last.

A Pharaoh came
With just one aim,
To live the same
As Ra,
So this tomb grew
Divine and new
To crown Khufu
A star.

Two million blocks
Of limestone rocks,
Each interlocks
To bring
What no earthquake
Or force could break,
How did they make
The thing?

Hot masons chipped
With chisels gripped,
Though their sweat dripped
In sun
That made them boil,
They'd not recoil
Until the toil
Was done.

After a while
When shaped in style
Along the Nile
Were sailed
The stones required,
No sage inspired
Or sculptor hired
Had failed.

With weight in place
Built to encase
The resting place
Bright light
Poured forth and streamed,
Smooth cladding beamed
On slopes that gleamed
Pure white.

Invincible
In principle,
Convincing all,
Unique,
From base to lid
Great Pyramid
Of gods who bid
You speak.

We can't perceive
What dreams men weave
But I believe
It meant
On high and free
Their king would be
Eternally
Content.


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Old 20-07-2011, 12:53
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Utterly blinding poem Musty, love the imagery, and pattern of the poem.

Also, I adore the subject matter; coincidentally I took delivery of an 8 DVD set on ancient Egypt by the History channel this week.


Incidentally Musty, a friend of mine is in the pre-production stage of having a poetry book published by an established publisher.

Any news on your project?
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Old 20-07-2011, 14:07
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Utterly blinding poem Musty, love the imagery, and pattern of the poem.

Also, I adore the subject matter; coincidentally I took delivery of an 8 DVD set on ancient Egypt by the History channel this week.

Any news on your project?
Thanks Troy That box set sounds great!

The stumbling block with organizing my poetry is the inexperience I have on a computer. I have two files but I need to cut and paste lots more poems before I can start compiling and correcting them. If I knew how to do this efficiently the job would have been done ages ago. As it stands, I have to wait till my brother visits to help me with the task.

Once this is done, I can make the selections that hopefully will make up a book - either by cyber means or even better, through a proper publishing house. The long wait for any of these developments to materialize has been very frustrating but I'm determined to get it done.
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. The long wait for any of these developments to materialize has been very frustrating but I'm determined to get it done.


Delighted to hear that Musty.

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Old 20-07-2011, 17:08
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It will happen my friend
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Old 20-07-2011, 18:19
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Another great one for the Education section Musty. I had imagined your poems all printed out and held in ring binders with card separating the sections.

Hope you enjoyed your day off Troy.
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Old 20-07-2011, 18:42
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Hope you enjoyed your day off Troy.

Very much so thanks Biz.

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Old 20-07-2011, 19:05
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I had imagined your poems all printed out and held in ring binders with card separating the sections.
I haven't got a printer Biz but I'm hoping to get one eventually - it'd be nice to see the poems in that format. Being a Luddite I do prefer paper to screens
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Old 20-07-2011, 22:19
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I haven't got a printer Biz but I'm hoping to get one eventually - it'd be nice to see the poems in that format. Being a Luddite I do prefer paper to screens
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Safer too. And it would be much easier to sort them out . I always print out anything important. It's odd that my bank urges customers to switch from paper statements, but if you print them out, make it impossible to use only one sheet. I keep a much used scrap sheet to print the unneeded excess. Waste not, want not.
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