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Old 27-06-2013, 15:30
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Hope you don't mind Musty but I've come up with

'Barges on ripply flowy waters
as Enid Blyton's Noddy saunters'
I like the lines Sandy but they're too long It has to be 1 2 3 4, 1 2 3 if you know what I mean I'm keeping Enid Blyton's Noddy tales. 'Barges floating free of sails' is my current solution but it may be a bit too blatantly obvious, as everyone is surely aware that barges don't have sails
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Old 27-06-2013, 15:37
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The Few

The snow hides the past
covered, a blanket of white
The sun shows the light
ice, melts upon the few
as tears fall and flow
then, until it is gone.
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Old 27-06-2013, 15:43
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Originally Posted by mr. mustard
I like the lines Sandy but they're too long It has to be 1 2 3 4, 1 2 3 if you know what I mean I'm keeping Enid Blyton's Noddy tales. 'Barges floating free of sails' is my current solution but it may be a bit too blatantly obvious, as everyone is surely aware that barges don't have sails
Barges floating free of sails works well.

A barge may not have a sail but it still travels, albeit a straight one
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Old 27-06-2013, 16:31
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Interesting, temporary is brief and fleeting so are we a moment too.
At the moment, yes.

Life has the momentum, but that too may look momentary on some time scales.
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Old 27-06-2013, 16:47
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Drat, I hate leaving confusion and I can see those unaware of the single Waterloo Sunset may be baffled Biz. Time to think again 'Tales and canals' has always bugged me too but focussing on Noddy's pals alone leaves him out of the equation. Thus the solution must be to change the word canals. I'll be back later - I love problem-solving in poetry

EDIT: Sunny singles by the Kinks

I like that as it absorbs Waterloo Sunset, Sunny Afternoon and nineteen-sixties optimism 'Barges floating free of sails' has just come to me
Awww! We wouldn't want to leave Noddy out of the equation.

Waterloo Sunset did come to mind, but I didn't know whether that was The Kinks.

Norfolk wherries were barges with sails, if that helps.
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Old 27-06-2013, 16:51
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Drat, I hate leaving confusion and I can see those unaware of the single Waterloo Sunset may be baffled Biz. Time to think again 'Tales and canals' has always bugged me too but focussing on Noddy's pals alone leaves him out of the equation. Thus the solution must be to change the word canals. I'll be back later - I love problem-solving in poetry

EDIT: Sunny singles by the Kinks

I like that as it absorbs Waterloo Sunset, Sunny Afternoon and nineteen-sixties optimism 'Barges floating free of sails' has just come to me
Awww! We wouldn't want to leave Noddy out of the equation. Mind you there wouldn't be any pals if there wasn't Noddy.

Waterloo Sunset did come to mind, but I didn't know whether that was The Kinks.

Norfolk wherries were barges with sails, if that helps.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Norfolk_wherry‎

Apparently a few have been saved according to this.

Ooops! I seem to have had afterthoughts.
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Old 27-06-2013, 19:00
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Could drop part of her name, like:

Barges on remote canals
Blyton's Noddy and his pals,

(Or Enid's Noddy...)
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Old 27-06-2013, 19:08
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Could drop part of her name, like:

Barges on remote canals
Blyton's Noddy and his pals,


(Or Enid's Noddy...)
I think you've got it Archiver. I wonder what Musty will decide on.

Place your bets now.................
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Old 28-06-2013, 05:07
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as tears fall and flow
then, until it is gone.
Completely beautiful as ever Sandy Melting ice here becomes a thing of emotion, what a great portrayal fleeting sadness.

Barges on remote canals
Blyton's Noddy and his pals,
I like 'Enid's Noddy and his pals' Arc, but it'd be nice to keep her whole name in as I find it sounds quite poetic. I think - and now I'm wavering again Thanks for your help

I wonder what Musty will decide on.

Place your bets now.................
Wow Biz, this is turning into a communal effort! Thanks to everyone for their suggestions Last night I came up with another solution but I still can't decide. So it's between:

Barges floating free of sails

Barges on slow river trails


Can we have a vote?
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Old 28-06-2013, 11:21
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Wow Biz, this is turning into a communal effort! Thanks to everyone for their suggestions Last night I came up with another solution but I still can't decide. So it's between:

Barges floating free of sails

Barges on slow river trails


Can we have a vote?
I'd go for the former, but only you can decide.
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Old 28-06-2013, 12:04
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I'd go for the former, but only you can decide.
Marvellous Biz, I'd already decided on that late last night I'm piecing together another very English type of poem, the idea for which came ages ago. It's drab, wet and grey here - perfect conditions for the mood I need
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Old 28-06-2013, 13:23
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Completely beautiful as ever Sandy Melting ice here becomes a thing of emotion, what a great portrayal fleeting sadness.


Barges floating free of sails

Barges on slow river trails


Can we have a vote?
Thanks Musty


Which line did you decide on?
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Old 28-06-2013, 13:39
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Which line did you decide on?
Barges floating free of sails
Enid Blyton's Noddy tales

Thanks Sandy and everyone for your help and interest
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Old 28-06-2013, 13:40
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The Jamboree

Sweet jam on the stands and the clapping of hands
Were just part of the jamboree fête,
The Morris Men danced and the villagers glanced
But the vicar of Dewdrop was late.

They fought tug-of-war and in barrels the chore
Was to dip poems out of the water,
A band did them proud and with rhubarb allowed
Stackridge cheered up each good son and daughter.

Ned sold tails to pin on a pink harlequin,
While the sight tickled Daisy the lamb
The Cheshire Cat grinned then sloped off on the wind
And the sad boy crooned Happy I Am.

The Odd Twins were there, or a similar pair
And the likeness was rather uncanny,
A Tom Sawyer fan skipped the day with his plan
To elope with young barley-gold Annie.

Some were so adroit at propelling a quoit
They could hoop every silver pole right,
The Paperman stared but he’d never have dared,
For the Paperman cometh at night.

And Peter O’Toole skinny-dipped in a pool
Dressed as Lawrence, exceedingly blonde
And a book of verse closed Edith Sitwell composed,
Read by beautiful Verity Bond.

Next morning would bring copper kettles that sing,
Breakfast menus and stories they traded
Of the fun and last tea at the big jamboree
Where the dusk hugged the sun till it faded.


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Old 28-06-2013, 13:57
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Barges floating free of sails
Enid Blyton's Noddy tales

Thanks Sandy and everyone for your help and interest
Glad to be of assistance.
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Old 28-06-2013, 14:10
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Glad to be of assistance.
You were Sandy - I'm off to do a bit of shopping in the rain now
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Old 28-06-2013, 14:25
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You were Sandy - I'm off to do a bit of shopping in the rain now
Don't forget your umbrella. I was in the rain earlier and my umbrella blew inside out. I never have much luck with umbrellas
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Old 29-06-2013, 01:55
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I never have much luck with umbrellas
And I never use them Sandy, I have an ever-present baseball cap for protection If anyone was wondering (which they probably weren't) Stackridge, who I name-checked in The Jamboree, were a real band in the seventies. Wielding sticks of rhubarb and dustbin lids at concerts, their fans were few but intensely loyal. Despite an album produced by ex-Beatles devotee George Martin, they never had a hit. It was nice slotting Stackridge into a poem and their Pinafore Days inspired it in some ways. All lovers of olde England should enjoy Pinafore Days

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ySh9MJHe74Q
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Old 29-06-2013, 02:13
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Aaarghhh!! Sorry Musty, but I could only endure about 30 seconds of that one. I expect it gets better, but I couldn't prolong my agony lol. Taste eh.
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Old 29-06-2013, 02:18
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Aaarghhh!! Sorry Musty, but I could only endure about 30 seconds of that one. I expect it gets better, but I couldn't prolong my agony lol. Taste eh.
No offence taken Arc, everyone has different tastes Some of my favourite things are very obscure, unlike Julie Andrews'
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Old 29-06-2013, 16:15
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Timeliness

Anyone for tennis?
Wimbledon is on.
So is the media's
annual obsession
whose gross set
of knowledge has
as many holes as
the average net.

When Murray is
done so is their
bit a fortnight's fun.
Not alas a lack of
space-fillers for
Rooney'll surely
be back doing nil
of consequence
to report on but
we always will yet.
Oh and the Royals
they never go away
hip hooray hooray!
Cheers and beers
all round ye happy
hacks, Pyms done
its bunk for a year.

Such a small (Katy)
price to pay keep
taking the tabloids
every day, Page 3
will never die still
poking in the eye.
Now if there was a
British Sharapova
and they didn't all
look like yer Clare
Balding and a bit
more like Will's
tasty bird. Rats and
drainpipes matey
all day ... werrhay.
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Old 29-06-2013, 16:25
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Wayside

You clasp into regrets –

crow,
picking at dead meat,
claws fixed,
locked deep,

head twitching
side to side,
watching,

rotted carrion,
fit for teasing along
one piece
at a time.
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Old 30-06-2013, 08:15
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I was wondering if, similarly to our dear friend Frank, I could get you (and maybe Biz too ) to call me John?
John it is then John - I shall consign Arc to the dark

Oh and the Royals
they never go away
A nice observation on our ever-present and shallow media Frank and so true I'm dreading the pathetic tidal wave of mush when the latest royal brat arrives I'll be using the same tactics that helped me to avoid the Olympics completely. Going out for more walks, keeping the telly tuned to news-free channels and keeping the radio switched off I don't like being brainwashed.

crow,
picking at dead meat,
Excellent Scottie - this reminded me so much of the Crow poems by Ted Hughes. Are you familiar with the book at all?
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Old 30-06-2013, 11:43
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Excellent Scottie - this reminded me so much of the Crow poems by Ted Hughes. Are you familiar with the book at all?
Hi - yes I'm familiar with Ted Hughes' work and although I wasn't directly conscious of his work at the time of writing I do see the echo. Crows can be great motifs.
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Old 30-06-2013, 11:48
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Crows can be great motifs.
I really love them, they seem like true outsiders
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