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Old 07-08-2016, 17:01
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[quote=archiver;83478154]Fallout Shelter.


Well, take solace in the fact you are not alone archiver ..... and I'm sure, despite it's being a bit grim now, it'll all work out swimmingly, probably xxx
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Old 08-08-2016, 14:27
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Fallout Shelter

So; farewell suckers.
Thanks for all the fish.
Bye bye me muckers.
Seal accomplished.
Hope it's not bye to your poetry muckers
I do love reading your poems .

Who gave you the fish ?
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Old 08-08-2016, 14:35
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Few really 'laugh out loud' online and I couldn't if I wanted to (I'm on the second floor of the library, where absolute silence reigns). Reggie's Veggies is completely hilarious and has shades of Ernie, Benny Hill's classic number one

I sense Reggie may have met Archibald the Trumper before his flight to Peru
With names like Reggie and Archie, I think they'd get on like a house on fire

Never been to Margate, but it sounds a bit like Blackpool used to be years ago before the decline of the great British seaside holiday . Massive shame, but time and tastes change I suppose . A glass of vino under the olive trees has taken over the stick of rock and the donkey .
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Old 08-08-2016, 14:38
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Alone after the battle

Many years in the red coat have flown,
And here I sit, on this Spanish hill, and weep.
With time to feel, for the first time.
And from my darkened soul comes, with pain,
A glint of light, I think.
Your poems are outstanding Elyan. Thanks for sharing
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Old 08-08-2016, 14:43
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It's said "it's better to have loved and lost


I'd rather not have loved at all.
I'd rather have been left alone.
Because now I'd be partying, having a ball
Instead of sitting here feeling like a proper SUCKER !!!!!
Hope you feel better writing that down . There aren't many people who can't understand the sentiment of your poem .
Great last line despite the meaning .
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Old 08-08-2016, 14:56
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Limbo Dancer.

How low can I go?
Depends if the stick
is balanced to know
that my little trick
is hard to show.

How high can I jump?
Depends if you trump
me with your last card.
At least a yard.

How deep does it get?
The more you fret
the less you see
the strategy.

The wherewithal?
The siren call?
To arms held wide
with love and pride
for joy of life
that full of strife
is not your wife.

The end? No way.
A friend to play
with for a change.

She's a bit strange.

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Old 08-08-2016, 15:08
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Hope it's not bye to your poetry muckers
I do love reading your poems .

Who gave you the fish ?
Thank you very much belly.

The lady in the shop gave me all the fish.

Weird how I had this page on a tab while writing Limbo Dancer and you posted around the same time. Often happens on this thread
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Old 08-08-2016, 21:03
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Thank you very much belly.

The lady in the shop gave me all the fish.

Weird how I had this page on a tab while writing Limbo Dancer and you posted around the same time. Often happens on this thread
I remember when limbo dancing was all the rage at school . I don't know how low I could go now ! I might give it a try..... I just did... and it's not very far.
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Old 08-08-2016, 21:14
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Hope you feel better writing that down . There aren't many people who can't understand the sentiment of your poem .
Great last line despite the meaning .

I DO feel better for writing it down. I guess it's cathartic

I must avoid the temptation to drone incessantly about it though, it's time to move on now.

*everyone I know breathes a sigh of relief*
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Old 08-08-2016, 22:33
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I DO feel better for writing it down. I guess it's cathartic

I must avoid the temptation to drone incessantly about it though, it's time to move on now.

*everyone I know breathes a sigh of relief*
Emotional turmoil always brings out the best poems, so before you feel completely better get writing
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Old 09-08-2016, 00:03
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I remember when limbo dancing was all the rage at school . I don't know how low I could go now ! I might give it a try..... I just did... and it's not very far.
I never knew they taught limbo dancing in the 30's!
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Old 09-08-2016, 09:27
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Wow, the thread's been rocking I'll have to catch up another time - I have to give someone a lift to hospital and time's short today. I'll leave one poem though

(welcome to the thread Bobbysmom by the way )
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Old 09-08-2016, 09:33
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Arwen Evenstar

As mithril jewels seen from afar
Or dew on silver turf,
What beauty Arwen Evenstar
Possessed in Middle-earth.

Her eyes were like a cloudless night,
With soft transparent lace
Her dresses left a pallid light,
As did her pretty face.

Despite the weight of decades she
Remained forever young;
A flower fair for all to see
Who spoke the Elvish tongue.

Her loveliness was unsurpassed
And poets still respond,
But Arwen Evenstar has passed
Into the mists beyond.


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Old 09-08-2016, 10:30
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I never knew they taught limbo dancing in the 30's!


I've just looked the word 'Limbo' up and surprisingly it's a word that's only been around since the 50's. Still a little bit before my time ..though not by much
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Old 09-08-2016, 14:45
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Energise.

Ever since the big banger.
No great surprises.
Tolerance breeds anger.
Anger energises.

Now we are to tolerate
the sadly underrated.
Excuse me while I cogitate
on what's understated:

That angry in a bottle
is likely to explode.
Previous besottle
was not any road,
but straighter and narrower
and planned to succeed.

Now some crazy farrower
is going full speed.

The shaken and the stirred
are making their lists.
Meanings nicely blurred
by their shaking fists.

The enemy within
can not do without
sound byte spin
to boldly shout
and call to arms
on all sides.

Never mind. God provides.

Well grr I say and also Grr.
Grey matter churns and whirrs
and out pops another rhyme.
Thought cops - forgive my crime.
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Old 09-08-2016, 21:32
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The Others.

Through ends of my extremities I feel the world at large.
I sends out my remedies. I never charge.

Others insist I must pay
for my existence,
or I'm in the way.

Others are so devious. Can't work them out.
Some exceed egregious and have no doubt
that theirs is the concept right as rain.

Others, from the onset like - not this again.

In other worlds and other words where did we go wrong?
Tribulated tribal herds sing the fighting song.

Marching to glory? Well I'll be blowed.
Guts look so gory on that well trod road.

I'm glad to be no other.
Individuality separates me
from my brother's stupidity.
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Old 09-08-2016, 21:45
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Oops.
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Old 09-08-2016, 21:52
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I was just about to reply , but it's gone

Yes very OK. OK ?

The first would make excellent lyrics for a rock song .
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Old 09-08-2016, 22:09
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I was just about to reply , but it's gone

Yes very OK. OK ?

The first would make excellent lyrics for a rock song .
Lol. Thanks again.

I tried to do poetry on stage many years ago. It didn't go well, but the audience was polite and the main act were encouraging. Maybe I'll try again sometime. Not so timid these days.
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Old 09-08-2016, 22:39
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There was a young man from Dunstable
Who was an annoying constable
He'd prod with his stick
Like an unwelcome prick
One would think he was mentally unstable
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Old 10-08-2016, 08:57
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The Boy in the Empty Cove

Hold me not, to future’s yawn,
Oh glorious summer day that gives.
To bring me here this lovely morn,
That I might breathe your air and live.

Time will never come to mind,
But leap into each day, then go.
To see what God, and all mankind
Bestowed to us that we might know.

To stay or go, is in my hands,
A freedom blind, and yet enjoyed.
Power to fly with wind, o’er sands,
In skies that warm this blissful boy.
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Old 10-08-2016, 22:47
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Lol. Thanks again.

I tried to do poetry on stage many years ago. It didn't go well, but the audience was polite and the main act were encouraging. Maybe I'll try again sometime. Not so timid these days.
Yes you should. All the regulars could by tickets and come to listen. We'd make sure things weren't polite
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Old 11-08-2016, 14:08
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Wow, the thread's been rocking I'll have to catch up another time - I have to give someone a lift to hospital and time's short today. I'll leave one poem though

(welcome to the thread Bobbysmom by the way )
Thank you kindly Sir xxx
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Old 11-08-2016, 22:37
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Initially I felt quite sick
My chest felt full of lead
on the day you turned to me
and this is what you said ....

"I don't want you anymore
I really just don't care".
A look of hatred on your face
a sneer firmly planted there.

I never saw it coming
The shock took my breath away.
I really had no idea
How to live through that awful day.

For 11 years you told me
I'd be the ONLY one.
You said you'd always love me
In this life and beyond.

But now the shock has run it's course
The pain has been and gone.
And in it's place a sense of peace
and freedom. Sadness? None!

I looked back on what we had
And do you know what I found?
11 years of being tied,
suffocated and bound.

You fed off me, drained my soul
Gave nothing back to me.
And now you wallow all alone
And me? Well I'm now free.

So take your parasitic ways
and find another fool.
You can't survive on your own
I KNOW that to be true.

Whilst I am really very good
at being just the one.
I don't need you. Big surprise!
I'm overjoyed you've gone!
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Old 11-08-2016, 22:42
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Whilst I am really very good
at being just the one.
I don't need you. Big surprise!
I'm overjoyed you've gone!
That sounds like you've had a big gust of fresh air blow through you. Well done you
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