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Old 30-08-2016, 19:12
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My final corrections are going well, which is leaving me more time in t'library I shall start catching up on the thread today

How lovely to see you back Mr Mustard.

I can tell that you are a true lover of poetry and you obviously take a lot of time out to read and inwardly digest all that's written here.

I'm guessing it's sort of like .... your baby .... type thing

And by the way .... I adore your stuff. I WILL be buying your book
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Old 30-08-2016, 19:16
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Here is my first attempt - total rubbish but at least I had a go.

White shark.

Eyes of obsidian black.

Power and merciless serenity of a God.

Ruler over oceans of time.

In danger from a sapient pygmy.
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Old 30-08-2016, 19:27
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Here is my first attempt - total rubbish but at least I had a go.

White shark.

Eyes of obsidian black.

The power and merciless serenity of a God.

Ruler over oceans of time.

In danger from a sapient pygmy.
I don't think its total rubbish .... it paints a clear picture in a few words.

That's not so easy to do. I certainly have to blurb on endlessly to get the same result so good on you
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Old 30-08-2016, 19:28
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I don't think its total rubbish .... it paints a clear picture in a few words.

That's not so easy to do. I certainly have to blurb on endlessly to get the same result so good on you
Thanks - I edited it slightly.
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Old 30-08-2016, 22:08
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Here is my first attempt - total rubbish but at least I had a go.

White shark.

Eyes of obsidian black.

Power and merciless serenity of a God.

Ruler over oceans of time.

In danger from a sapient pygmy.
That's very powerful Keyser. I think you are in a good place to right about the animal world. I don't think there has been a dinosaur poem in this thread
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Old 30-08-2016, 22:51
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That's very powerful Keyser. I think you are in a good place to right about the animal world. I don't think there has been a dinosaur poem in this thread
Thanks, I am not at my best at the moment but when I feel a bit better will think of doing one.
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Old 30-08-2016, 23:02
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Thanks, I am not at my best at the moment but when I feel a bit better will think of doing one.
I'll look forward to you trying to rhythm something with Piatnitzkysaurus.
I think writing poetry seems to help some people when they feel a bit lost with the world. Maybe you could give it a try. Feel better soon
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Old 30-08-2016, 23:06
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I'll look forward to you trying to rhythm something with Piatnitzkysaurus.
I think writing poetry seems to help some people when they feel a bit lost with the world. Maybe you could give it a try. Feel better soon
Thanks. X
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Old 30-08-2016, 23:29
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The Tor without a scene...

At times the Tor seems sometimes flat
And no matter where you are at
No matter how hard it is for you
Let the scene come shining through.
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Old 30-08-2016, 23:34
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Old 31-08-2016, 08:04
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I think writing poetry seems to help some people when they feel a bit lost with the world.
You are SO right there belly button.
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Old 31-08-2016, 08:24
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Poetry is sometimes the BEST medicine.


I felt quite rough
When my life got tough.
But I got through
and now I'm tickety boo.

At my very worst
I knocked out a verse.
I wrote another one
and then continued on.

It's better than moping,
and a great way of coping
with stuff that knocks us flat.
Enough already of THAT!
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Old 01-09-2016, 01:04
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Past Ten'ts.

Oh purple tin of amber nectar
gurgle deep within conjecture
numb my gums and slither down
soon the biggest clown in town.

Big T frosty from the fridge
Refreshing as a new religion
based on what is truly known
and what in fact can be shown.

The squelch of the ring pull
half a litre hand full
shhhhhh as the frothiness
prepares to make me a mess.

First taster instant thrill
tastier than any pill
soon followed by another
and another and its brother.

But, alas and alack
here I sit on my jack
without a drop to my name
which really is quite a shame.

Considering it's been so long.
Considering, but still strong.
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Old 01-09-2016, 07:51
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Past Ten'ts.


Considering it's been so long.
Considering, but still strong.

WOW.

Good on ya archiver!!!
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:10
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And by the way .... I adore your stuff. I WILL be buying your book
Thanks very much Ruth I see the thread as everyone's but I guess I have nurtured it over time

They call me Musty by the way - I must get some air freshener
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:13
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This should have been forest against Mersey red
But ninety five fans have ended up dead
What a moving tribute to the 95. Nuff said Stuart
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:15
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And there's a very funny twinge
twanging in my hip.
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:23
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"Son" was written by the Russian Jewish poet Pavel Antokolsky,a year after the death of his 18 year old son Lieutenant Vladimir Antokolovsky,killed in action on June 6th,1942
You can read many books on the war, but I find poetry captures its tragedy more intensely. Armistice Day wouldn't be the same without verse.

Thanks for posting this Saturn
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:26
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Always avoid bright colours and specimens of mangelwurzel
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:30
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The Voice.
Observers observed a telly-tubby sun
and stars came out that very night

The Choice
I hope the alien was Dipsy, I always liked his hat

The Choice is heavy but interesting
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:33
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I’m a wannabe singer in a bland boy band
bombing social media - in hope of a helping hand
A different style from your usual one Scottie. Some good points were made in your song. Apart from Take That, I find most boy bands are talentless oiks
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:36
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I like the way you put this into four segments Ruth. A positive spin on the eternal questions
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:40
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I, for one, would label this a very excellent thread.
So there you go, I rest my case, poetry is far from dead!
A lovely tribute to the thread I'm glad you like it here Ruth and I'm always happy when the place is busy! Others must agree with you, going by the amount of views we get
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:49
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And through broken sobs he tells her "My Mother died today".
WOW, what a twist at the end! The constant rush of modern life tends to kill emotions. I felt so sorry for the boy on the till

An excellent, top-notch write
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Old 01-09-2016, 09:53
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Then I found out
You've got a girl.
It's not nice, is it? It's been a while since I've had a snog
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