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Old 01-11-2016, 09:42
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At Castlerigg

Forty-two grey monoliths
Of metamorphic slate,
Castlerigg survives today
Retaining thirty-eight.

I stood east of Keswick where
The mountains blew my mind,
Humbled by a circle that
The ancients left behind.

When I saw the snowy heights
Surrounding that old ring
Pierce the sky majestically
My heart began to sing.

Then above the peaks there beamed
A golden sun at last,
Rising up to illustrate
Our Neolithic past.

Next to Stonehenge, Castlerigg
May seem a lesser star
Yet compared to every site
It's lovelier by far.


https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Castlerigg_stone_circle
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Old 01-11-2016, 09:52
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The torch had blown a gasket
I soon had lost my spunk

I dropped the candle holder
And fire raged like the pox
Another comedy ripper BB The above lines in particular I found really funny - the first two probably for the wrong reasons

Your tongue-in-cheek tales of woe are a hoot
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Old 01-11-2016, 09:58
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Dream

Then o’er an inky, silent pool,
The dream god ends my sleep,
Before the hands of an awful ghoul,
Can drag me to the deep
An awesome verse from an excellent poem. Me and a friend watched Paranormal Activity yesterday, a film she'd never seen Your Dream is cut from the same cloth Elyan, a truly frightening piece
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Old 01-11-2016, 10:05
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FEELINGS


Feelings are an odd set up
I get them everyday.
Sometimes good and sometimes not,
Some vanish while others stay.

The ones which start in the gut
tend to be a warning sign.
Take heed and 9 times outta 10
Everything works out fine.
Ignore them at your peril
by just putting them on the shelf.
You MAY find you wished you'd taken note
As you end up kicking yourself!

Then there are the feelings
you wear on the sleeve of your shirt.
Be careful about doing that.
They can so easily be hurt.
And there's no sticking plaster
Nor ointment or potion or pill
That'll heal the wound that's left behind,
It can make you feel quite ill.

There are however some
rare feelings that I cherish.
They're comforting and safe
and even with time don't perish.
It's only when the years fly by
but the feelings seem to stay,
you realise how deep they are,
They never went away.

If you are ever lucky enough
to find someone who makes you smile,
and makes you feel all warm inside
then go that extra mile.
Tell them about those feelings.
Don't risk the hand of fate.
It won't be a good feeling
if you leave it until it's too late.




(Based on personal experience )
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Old 01-11-2016, 10:07
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Ah, the night is closing
It appears you are yet fresh
I see your blood is coursing
So warm is now your flesh
An eerie take on the vampire tradition, which I always find slightly erotic Your poem had the same flavour BB, I could say it was bloody good I suppose

I also watched Bram Stoker's Dracula recently, which stars Gary Oldman and Winona Ryder. It's both horror film and love story with norty bits added
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Old 01-11-2016, 10:13
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FEELINGS

Tell them about those feelings.
Don't risk the hand of fate.
It won't be a good feeling
if you leave it until it's too late.
Ain't that the truth. What a poem, I'm sure the sentiments expressed will resonate with many who read the thread Ruth

One from the heart, obviously
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Old 01-11-2016, 10:15
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Ain't that the truth. What a poem, I'm sure the sentiments expressed will resonate with many who read the thread Ruth

One from the heart, obviously
Absolutely
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Old 01-11-2016, 10:47
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A day late . . .

It’s the night of Halloween
And not a ghost or a ghoul has been seen
Not a shock, not a fright
On this dark and dank Halloween night.

The dead lie dead, unstirring in their graves
The vampire bats hang happily asleep in their caves
The werewolves are sleeping, curled up peaceful and tight
Not a creature is stirring on this dark and dank Halloween night.

Frankenstein’s reconciled to his many different parts,
The mummy’s lost his taste for fresh warm human hearts
Dracula’s got dentures and lost his fangled bite
The monsters have turned away from evil on this dark and dank Halloween night.

So all you trick and treaters dressed as your favourite ghoul
If you want to be a monster, it’s no longer cool
Darkness and fear have been replaced by the light
There’s nothing truly scary on this dark and dank Halloween night.
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Old 02-11-2016, 18:52
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Thanks very much for that BB With hindsight, The Designer is flawed throughout. The volume's too slim, the book's dimensions are wrong, the poems are set out in a DS style with bold titles and a number of errors slipped through the net too. That said, I'm still happy with the content and front and back covers.

There's going to be a big improvement - if The Designer was a drop, the next book's an ocean
No problem at all. The mods are fine with it, so when the new book is out I'll plaster the link all over the place
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Old 02-11-2016, 18:55
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Another comedy ripper BB The above lines in particular I found really funny - the first two probably for the wrong reasons

Your tongue-in-cheek tales of woe are a hoot
It's all in the mind of the beholder
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Old 02-11-2016, 18:57
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FEELINGS

The ones which start in the gut
tend to be a warning sign.
Take heed and 9 times outta 10
Everything works out fine.
Ignore them at your peril
by just putting them on the shelf.
You MAY find you wished you'd taken note
As you end up kicking yourself!

(Based on personal experience )
I hope romance is in the air
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Old 02-11-2016, 19:08
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No problem at all. The mods are fine with it, so when the new book is out I'll plaster the link all over the place

How FABULOUS! I'll be first in there to get my copy
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Old 02-11-2016, 19:10
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I hope romance is in the air

I SAY ..... steady on there girl

Erm ..... does it REALLY come across like that?

Hmmmm .... on further inspection I guess it kinda does.


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Old 03-11-2016, 00:15
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I SAY ..... steady on there girl

Erm ..... does it REALLY come across like that?

Hmmmm .... on further inspection I guess it kinda does.


Must you let smut invade this thread?
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Old 03-11-2016, 09:22
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It's all in the mind of the beholder
Must you let smut invade this thread?
What a Carry On
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Old 03-11-2016, 09:28
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The Alphabet Ruck

A began to rant and curse,
Severely niggling B,
Other letters acted worse,
Which also upset C.

D was peaceful, you could tell
And so became the ref,
Which by the way was just as well
For E had used an F.

G found H unbearable,
Provoking I to say
'None of you are capital,
Especially J and K.'

L disliked M's company,
Who wasn't fond of N,
O required an urgent P
But had to Q again.

R made faces at the rest
Until the air turned blue,
S got mad when T confessed
A secret hate of U.

V (who wore a great big hat)
Tried everything to vex
W who swung a bat
And clobbered poor old X.

Sick of alphabetic rucks,
Y thundered off to bed;
'When letters fight it really sucks'
Declared a weary Z.


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Old 03-11-2016, 09:40
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Dracula’s got dentures and lost his fangled bite
Scottie strikes with a new and entertaining twist on Halloween - one devoid of monsters The line about Dracula's really funny, what an image

I never got round to writing a Halloween entry this time, but I'm still working on 'The Crisp Man was Late', a comedy/horror poem
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Old 03-11-2016, 09:46
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No problem at all. The mods are fine with it, so when the new book is out I'll plaster the link all over the place
How FABULOUS! I'll be first in there to get my copy

Ta BB and Ruth My computer wizard brought down the final print-out recently (there's been about four in all). I'm now doing a forensic proof-read, looking for any more mistakes or last small improvements I can make.
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Old 03-11-2016, 12:54
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Near the knuckle


Keyser, I don't understand.
Smut? Invade the thread?
I've no idea what you mean,
Was it something that I said?

BB, it seems you saw
Romance? In the air?
I read again the lines I wrote
You have a good point there!

Musty, your take on this,
"What a carry on!"
I'm surprised it caused a stir
The poem was an innocent one.

But I CAN do near the knuckle,
I CAN do steamy and hot.
In fact I can do naughty
Shall I give it a shot?

Let me lie down here a while,
and catch my breath and rest.
I'm feeling strange sensations
growing in my chest.

I don't know why I'm feeling warm,
It's cool, the room I'm in
and though I'm wearing very little
the lace is heavy on my skin.

I really need to throw it off
free my body, legs and hips.
I want YOU to touch my skin
with hands and tongue and lips.

Your mouth upon my neck
makes me arch my back
Then you look into my eyes
and see the pupils, huge and black.

I gasp, I groan, my mind is lost
in a wave of ecstasy
You take me to the place
where I always wanted to be.

Now I'm very hot and wet
and tingling, heart beating fast.
That which I've often imagined
is happening at last.

We kiss, it's deep, our tongues dance
in your hand a breast you cup
You move your lips down to it
And then suddenly .. I WAKE UP!



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Old 03-11-2016, 22:55
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The Alphabet Ruck

Sick of alphabetic rucks,
Y thundered off to bed;
'When letters fight it really sucks'
Declared a weary Z.


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That's great Musty ! It's the sort of poem that's good to memorise and children would love
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Old 03-11-2016, 22:56
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Near the knuckle

But I CAN do near the knuckle,
I CAN do steamy and hot.
In fact I can do naughty
Shall I give it a shot?



Maybe not one to memorise for the kids
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Old 04-11-2016, 00:22
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Near the knuckle


Keyser, I don't understand.
Smut? Invade the thread?
I've no idea what you mean,
Was it something that I said?

BB, it seems you saw
Romance? In the air?
I read again the lines I wrote
You have a good point there!

Musty, your take on this,
"What a carry on!"
I'm surprised it caused a stir
The poem was an innocent one.

But I CAN do near the knuckle,
I CAN do steamy and hot.
In fact I can do naughty
Shall I give it a shot?

Let me lie down here a while,
and catch my breath and rest.
I'm feeling strange sensations
growing in my chest.

I don't know why I'm feeling warm,
It's cool, the room I'm in
and though I'm wearing very little
the lace is heavy on my skin.

I really need to throw it off
free my body, legs and hips.
I want YOU to touch my skin
with hands and tongue and lips.

Your mouth upon my neck
makes me arch my back
Then you look into my eyes
and see the pupils, huge and black.

I gasp, I groan, my mind is lost
in a wave of ecstasy
You take me to the place
where I always wanted to be.

Now I'm very hot and wet
and tingling, heart beating fast.
That which I've often imagined
is happening at last.

We kiss, it's deep, our tongues dance
in your hand a breast you cup
You move your lips down to it
And then suddenly .. I WAKE UP!



Wonderful stuff.

May I ask who is giving 'a shot' and of what?
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Old 04-11-2016, 10:27
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Maybe not one to memorise for the kids
I was SO tempted to go a lot further ... but decided discretion was called for ... sadly
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Old 04-11-2016, 10:27
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Wonderful stuff.

May I ask who is giving 'a shot' and of what?
You may ask but my lips are sealed
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Old 04-11-2016, 10:30
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The Alphabet Ruck


Sick of alphabetic rucks,
Y thundered off to bed;
'When letters fight it really sucks'
Declared a weary Z.


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Absolutely LOVE it
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