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That's great Musty but I feel I haven't done anything to deserve a ta .![]() Sometimes poems just need a touch on the tiller to improve them ![]() So ta
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I was veering towards my alteration, but if you'd preferred the original line I might have had doubts
Sometimes poems just need a touch on the tiller to improve them ![]() So ta ![]()
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Facebook woes
The typing of anxious fingers,
Status now rejecting all theoretically, As those untold feelings that did linger, Revealed with drunken diplomacy. Flatmate does regret her departure, Cause she left the red and milk tray, But not as much as him the morning after, As faces go rosy in the cold light of day. No point in hitting the delete button, Just blame it on the alcohol, Though there goes the whole not a glutton, But seriously what is the protocol? A lining in the cloud does indeed exist, no need to keep the pretence of a happy coexist. |
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No point in hitting the delete button,
Just blame it on the alcohol, I enjoyed this tale of a splintered relationship very much. Nice one Daznov ![]() I haven't abandoned the thread, it's just been a very strange week and events conspired to stop me writing. Normal service will be resumed shortly, no tennis pun intended
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Open Windows.
Slowly driven quite mad by their incessant bleating. Open windows to cool infernal heating. Dog with squeaky toy. Loud mouthed little boy. Reverse protection warning. Red mist forming. Oooh Eee Oooh Ah Ah as loud as it can go. I may kill someone today. Someone I don't know. |
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Life On Mars.
It's so quiet on Mars. No children or cars. No noisy machines or baby screams. No sign of life. No nonsense or strife or crazy denials for millions of miles. No regrets. Pure blue sunsets and star filled nights. No return flights could tempt me away. Right here I'll stay. Can you see me waving? I'm not even craving your company. At last I'm free. |
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Dog with squeaky toy. Loud mouthed little boy. Reverse protection warning. Red mist forming. A great write and one I could associate with strongly. |
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Life On Mars.
Can you see me waving? I'm not even craving your company. In one more crazy thread coincidence, not ten minutes ago I finished Starman, a superb biography of David Bowie. He of course had a big hit with Life On Mars? I enjoyed the last verse in particular John, that's a great kiss-off and up yours moment
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Truly odd that. If I wasn't a complete sceptic I'd be wondering if all (would be) poets are connected somehow.
![]() Glad you enjoyed them. Writing the second one certainly helped me work around the problems highlighted in the first... |
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Truly odd that. If I wasn't a complete sceptic I'd be wondering if all (would be) poets are connected somehow.
![]() At times two poems have come in simultaneously on the same topic with both writers unaware of the other's intentions I wondered if there was a connection between Open Windows and Life On Mars, as each of them refers to noise and quietness in some way
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Hello Musty and John.
I would try to make an intelligent comment, but I'm just too hot and tired so I'll have to try another day. Goodnight. :yawn: sorry
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Hello Musty and John.
I would try to make an intelligent comment, but I'm just too hot and tired so I'll have to try another day. Goodnight. :yawn: sorry I hope you get a good night, I know I won't
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Legendary Britain
When glades are full of bursting sprigs, Around and in between That figure leaping over twigs Is young Jack-in-the-Green. A witch who ruled this wood myths tell Lives silently, for she Transformed herself with one last spell Into an elder tree. If you observe small beams at night They’re only fairie trails, The pearly-dewdrop silver light Described in old folk tales. A circle called the Giant's Dance Colossal men would bring, A wizard kept them in a trance While each one raised the ring. And as the May Queen‘s theme is played Her hobby horse ahead Shall caper in the big parade, John Barleycorn is dead. The tearful elves left times of change, On ships downcast but free They sailed from Britain, out of range To some forgotten sea. © |
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© I hope you slept better than I did. Come back legendary British weather............please.
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I could do with a few of those magical figures to carry out a few tasks for me, because every time I undertake any activity at all away from a fan on maximum, I melt..........and a bit of rain at night wouldn't go amiss.
It's incredibly hot, I have to stay in when it's like this. I'm getting back to watching the final now - I still find Andy Murray a hard character to like
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© Blinding stuff Musty. From the depths of your limitless imagination.
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It's incredibly hot, I have to stay in when it's like this. I'm getting back to watching the final now - I still find Andy Murray a hard character to like
![]() I find Murray too petulant. I'll leave you to watch the rest of it.
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I did watch it to the end, but I feel very sorry for the loser because he is a brilliant player.
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Cold drinks and ice cream has got me through the day so far.
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I did watch it to the end, but I feel very sorry for the loser because he is a brilliant player.
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It was a good tennis match with a few moments of suspense.
![]() ![]() Can I have a lick of your ice cream? Please.
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I haven't been watching Wimbledon this year, and couldn't have watched the whole of the final, but luckily I just chanced on the final part. Too much tension for me, I'm exhausted just watching them.
![]() Can I have a lick of your ice cream? Please. ![]() ![]() You can have some Vienetta if you like.
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Blinding stuff Musty.
From the depths of your limitless imagination. I've since made a few very minor changes to the poem, making it flow better in places Apparently The Giant's Dance was an archaic name for Stonehenge. There are lots of legends about a race of giants who lived long ago. I guess it was one explanation for our most famous ancient site being there.I'm glad everyone enjoyed the tennis, I found it completely gripping
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That's great Musty but I feel I haven't done anything to deserve a ta .
Sometimes poems just need a touch on the tiller to improve them 
I enjoyed the last verse in particular John, that's a great kiss-off and up yours moment