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Old 05-01-2014, 19:19
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I wasn't sure if I'd met this poem before, but I seem to think you've visited Avalon on more than one occasion.
I have done in other poems, but this is about the fourth version of Voyage. Amongst other changes, I got rid of lines about Lancelot and Merlin. I felt this Avalon worked better as a generalised paradise, rather than with Arthurian details.
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Old 05-01-2014, 20:45
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hello folks Frank's best wishes
have been out of commission/order for a while .... will return
as I see musty and archiver Biz going strong long may the thread endure. (Frank)
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Old 05-01-2014, 22:24
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hello folks Frank's best wishes
have been out of commission/order for a while .... will return
as I see musty and archiver Biz going strong long may the thread endure. (Frank)
Hey Musty, Frank's back. Hi Frank good to see you. Happy New Year.
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Old 05-01-2014, 22:26
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hello folks Frank's best wishes
have been out of commission/order for a while .... will return
as I see musty and archiver Biz going strong long may the thread endure. (Frank)
FRANK!!!!

You've made my new year even better mate! Great to see you here again, I hope all is well! Archiver has vanished but I hope he follows in your footsteps and returns too

Excellent news
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Old 05-01-2014, 22:28
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Hey Musty, Frank's back. Hi Frank good to see you. Happy New Year.
I just popped in and saw his post Biz
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Old 05-01-2014, 22:29
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I felt this Avalon worked better as a generalised paradise, rather than with Arthurian details.
It certainly sounded like Heaven.
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Old 05-01-2014, 22:35
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I just popped in and saw his post Biz
Is that the cat that got the cream? Right where are you Archiver? We're waiting..............
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Old 05-01-2014, 22:46
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Is that the cat that got the cream? Right where are you Archiver? We're waiting..............
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Old 05-01-2014, 23:01
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It certainly sounded like Heaven.
As you know Biz, a light phase is usually followed by a dark one After nice tranquil shores and Avalon, it's likely something wicked this way comes....
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Old 06-01-2014, 01:46
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Certainly preferable to "I am caught In memories of longing turned to dust". The only thing that puzzles me is why the lady is weeping. Hmmm I shall ponder on this.
I imagine she weeps for the grey of the real Biz. So many say they perceive it that way.

Apologies for my absenteeism. Real world conspires to demand more of my time... I often read the thread though. Wouldn't miss a spell in Avalon - for the world! Superb writing Musty.

My sincere good wishes to all who read and/or write here, in 2014 and beyond.
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Old 06-01-2014, 02:51
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Absolute Accordance.

Meanwhile; under construction,
awaiting one's abduction,
all you wanted and much more.

It is all that you are for
and will be who you will be -
the moment you are free.

Beyond the buildings made of cake
and the lemonade lake.

Upstream of all idle chatter
and the questions that don't matter.

Through great fields of vibrations
where no trials or tribulations
carry weight or importance:
Absolute Accordance.
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Old 06-01-2014, 07:30
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Apologies for my absenteeism. Real world conspires to demand more of my time... I often read the thread though. Wouldn't miss a spell in Avalon - for the world! Superb writing Musty.
Archiver!! I'm so glad you're back!!!! There's no need to apologise, I fully understand about time constraints. I was starting to wonder about alien abduction though Thanks for the comment on Voyage to Avalon by the way With Frank and Archiver returning, I'm in party mood - what a pity it's only 7:15 in the morning

Absolute Accordance.
One reason I've missed your material is the way you litter a poem with intriguing gems, making the verse come alive. I would never have started a poem with the word 'Meanwhile'. I also love the buildings made of cake and lemonade lake. They really stood out and reminded me of Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds. That Beatle classic has tangerine trees and marmalade skies in it.

Absolute Accordance is lovely and hints of Richard Dreyfuss at the end of Close Encounters. What a comeback by you Archiver
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Old 06-01-2014, 07:46
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Have you seen my mitts?


Have you, have you you?!



My despair has no fits

Bunch of gits...

Shiny cat's tits
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Old 06-01-2014, 10:16
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Wow! Happy New Year Archiver. Good to see you and I hope your time constraints are a good thing.

I imagine she weeps for the grey of the real Biz. So many say they perceive it that way.
Hahahaha! It's fascinating what people read into poetry. I have to say I believe that my real life is as close to Heaven as I'll ever get. The more I learn about the world, the more I realize how very fortunate I've been.

Absolute Accordance.
That sounds to me like another version of Heaven.
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Old 06-01-2014, 11:57
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As you know Biz, a light phase is usually followed by a dark one After nice tranquil shores and Avalon, it's likely something wicked this way comes....
Thanks for reminding me. Rest assured that I will only read it in daylight, so if any other pals are not so keen on a good night's sleep, please feel free. (You know what I'm saying Frank - DON'T WAIT FOR ME TO POST as you are wont to do - did you hear that?)

..........You too Archiver........

..........Sandy....et al..........
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Old 06-01-2014, 13:33
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Rest assured that I will only read it in daylight
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Old 06-01-2014, 13:58
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To thine own self be true. It's what I've always done with previous dark poems.

Just call me Polonius.
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Old 06-01-2014, 15:27
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Just call me Polonius.
I had to Google that to understand it Biz, I'm not too good on Shakespeare But never fear, nothing remotely dark came through today! I have a question about Voyage to Avalon instead. In that penultimate verse again, I end a line with 'me and you'. I obviously used that to rhyme with 'too' - but I believe the correct term is you and I. Putting aside poetic license, how wrong is me and you?
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Old 06-01-2014, 15:44
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I had to Google that to understand it Biz
I Googled it too - to find out who had said it. (As an after thought.) Apparently Shakespeare's meaning wasn't quite mine, but I know what I meant.


I have a question about Voyage to Avalon instead. In that penultimate verse again, I end a line with 'me and you'. I obviously used that to rhyme with 'too' - but I believe the correct term is you and I. Putting aside poetic license, how wrong is me and you?
You would say "Those loved ones I've lost greeting me" - not I, so I'd say what you have written is correct.

(Grrrr! It's so complicated using this site compared with the original.)
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Old 06-01-2014, 16:20
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However, unless you're American, it's poetic licence. not license - c is the noun and s is the verb in English.
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Old 06-01-2014, 17:14
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However, unless you're American, it's poetic licence. not license - c is the noun and s is the verb in English.
This is why I ask you stuff Biz - obscure details like that are a mystery to me I take your point about the singular thing but isn't 'you and me' still wrong? Sorry to keep on but I like to get things right or they bug me, as you know
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Old 06-01-2014, 17:51
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I like to get things right or they bug me, as you know
I understand. Your best bet is to consult friend Google. I like to keep it simple, but I also would prefer to know if I'm wrong, so I'm sure Googling "I or me" will explain it in more depth.

There's a good test on the Bristol University site.
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Old 06-01-2014, 18:45
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I understand. Your best bet is to consult friend Google. I like to keep it simple, but I also would prefer to know if I'm wrong, so I'm sure Googling "I or me" will explain it in more depth.
Ta Biz, I'll give it a go later
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Old 06-01-2014, 19:06
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Ta Biz, I'll give it a go later
It's very quick and uncomplicated. A click gives you the correct answer straight away. It takes less than a minute. I tried it.
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Old 06-01-2014, 19:23
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It's very quick and uncomplicated. A click gives you the correct answer straight away. It takes less than a minute. I tried it.
Can you give me the result please? I'm not much good at that sort of thing Biz
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