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Old 06-01-2014, 19:25
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Alison's House

I passed it by today,
Looked up at those white-framed windows
And thought of you.

Sometimes I wonder
And sometimes I just reminisce fondly,
Remembering our unlikely friendship;
The age difference that didn’t matter,
The in-crowd I briefly made you leave.

Listening to New Order in my car
Or walking you home after work.

Things culminated in your house
On the special night;
How strange to hear the words
‘I love you’.

Of course, I knew it could never last
As you were spoken for all along,
The wedding date set
And married life waiting.

I passed it by today,
Looked up at those white-framed windows
And wondered where you are now.


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Old 06-01-2014, 19:39
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Can you give me the result please? I'm not much good at that sort of thing Biz
Hahahahaha! You're pulling my leg right? If not, Google "I or me" it's the second item on the page. Believe me, you won't be sorry.

Alison's House.
Awww! A sad story................but what did she think she was playing at? I wonder how long the marriage lasted.
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Old 06-01-2014, 21:30
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Thanks for the welcome back Biz & Musty. Am working on my first poem since I was indisposed, post soon I hope folks of the thread. Frank
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Old 06-01-2014, 21:51
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Am working on my first poem since I was indisposed, post soon I hope folks of the thread. Frank
Sorry to hear you've been ill Frank - I did wonder. It sounds to have been serious. Hope you are fully recovered.
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Old 06-01-2014, 23:08
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Thanks for the welcome back Biz & Musty. Am working on my first poem since I was indisposed, post soon I hope folks of the thread. Frank
Looking forward to it Frank - take care my friend

Hahahahaha! You're pulling my leg right?
Not really Biz, I don't Google for grammar tips I got the answer on the Better Writing Skills site - I'm happy now Quote:

'On a related note, when using phrases such as you and me, you and I or them and us, it has traditionally been considered courteous to place the reference to yourself last. For example, we prefer:

He'll ask you and me later.'
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Old 06-01-2014, 23:17
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Awww! A sad story................but what did she think she was playing at? I wonder how long the marriage lasted.
I haven't seen Alison since the late 90s Biz. At the time it was a very serious thing and enormously risky. The engagement party was full of relations of the couple and people from work. Only Alison and I knew why I wasn't invited.

A friend of mine said it was her final fling before marriage, but I know she fell in love with me. I still have the beautiful letter she wrote, ending the affair. I passed her old house today on my walk into town and the poem began in my head. I love it when that happens.

Sorry for rattling on
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Old 07-01-2014, 01:13
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Archiver!! I'm so glad you're back!!!! There's no need to apologise, I fully understand about time constraints. I was starting to wonder about alien abduction though Thanks for the comment on Voyage to Avalon by the way With Frank and Archiver returning, I'm in party mood - what a pity it's only 7:15 in the morning
Not really returning as such. I find the forums just too time consuming, but I'll probably always read occasionally, and maybe contribute if I get inspired by an Alison moment..


One reason I've missed your material is the way you litter a poem with intriguing gems, making the verse come alive. I would never have started a poem with the word 'Meanwhile'. I also love the buildings made of cake and lemonade lake. They really stood out and reminded me of Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds. That Beatle classic has tangerine trees and marmalade skies in it.

Absolute Accordance is lovely and hints of Richard Dreyfuss at the end of Close Encounters. What a comeback by you Archiver
Your kind words of encouragement have meant so much over the years, it seems pretty lame to just say - thanks again, but thanks again to you, and Biz for similar appreciation.
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Old 07-01-2014, 01:14
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Wow! Happy New Year Archiver. Good to see you and I hope your time constraints are a good thing.
They aren't a bad thing. Just unceasing and increasing.

Hahahaha! It's fascinating what people read into poetry. I have to say I believe that my real life is as close to Heaven as I'll ever get. The more I learn about the world, the more I realize how very fortunate I've been.
Bold bit is quite a statement. Could you not imagine it a teeny bit better in some way?

That sounds to me like another version of Heaven.
Nah. No crumbly old gods involved. "heaven" though? Possibly. Design your own? Maybe some buildings made of cake after all.
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Old 07-01-2014, 02:17
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Your kind words of encouragement have meant so much over the years, it seems pretty lame to just say - thanks again, but thanks again to you, and Biz for similar appreciation.
No problem Archiver - you'll always be welcome here, even if you don't post often
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Old 07-01-2014, 12:22
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Not really Biz, I don't Google for grammar tips I got the answer on the Better Writing Skills site - I'm happy now Quote:

'On a related note, when using phrases such as you and me, you and I or them and us, it has traditionally been considered courteous to place the reference to yourself last. For example, we prefer:

He'll ask you and me later.'
Ahhh! Pleased you got it sorted.



I haven't seen Alison since the late 90s Biz. At the time it was a very serious thing and enormously risky. The engagement party was full of relations of the couple and people from work. Only Alison and I knew why I wasn't invited.

A friend of mine said it was her final fling before marriage, but I know she fell in love with me. I still have the beautiful letter she wrote, ending the affair. I passed her old house today on my walk into town and the poem began in my head. I love it when that happens.

Sorry for rattling on
It would be interesting to know what she is doing now.
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Old 07-01-2014, 12:23
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Uhoh! Double post. Switched to main site so I could multi quote, but first time got told that Sid couldn't be found - or something to that effect - so posted again.
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Old 07-01-2014, 12:30
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They aren't a bad thing. Just unceasing and increasing.

Bold bit is quite a statement. Could you not imagine it a teeny bit better in some way?

Nah. No crumbly old gods involved. "heaven" though? Possibly. Design your own? Maybe some buildings made of cake after all.
a)Some phases of life are like that. Can be exhausting. Take care.

b) Yes it could be better, but it could also be a lot, lot worse.

c) Only in my imagination. I suppose I'm too tediously down-to-earth to bother.
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Old 07-01-2014, 12:37
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Newgrange

There’s a place vast and fey
In old Ireland today
That obsessive believers once built,
Where the myths rise and join
At the Bend in the Boyne
And the fields make an emerald quilt.

At the gigantic mound
Stones reveal their profound
Spiralled carvings, with much to relate
The unique entrance shows
Where the passage grave goes,
How it’s waiting for one single date.

Those astronomers knew
Winter Solstice was due,
When the rising sun clearly would send
Beams of glory that shine
Down the passage’s line
To the chamber that lies at the end.

A celestial light
Is a wonderful sight,
Seventeen minutes only to glare,
Where the myths rise and join
At the Bend in the Boyne
And a rebirth fills all of the air.


http://www.megalithicireland.com/Newgrange.htm
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Old 07-01-2014, 12:42
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Ahhh! Pleased you got it sorted.
It still doesn't sound right, but who am I to argue?
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Old 07-01-2014, 12:43
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Tsk, another cock-up - I've got butter fingers Biz
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Old 07-01-2014, 16:23
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Downbeat I'm afraid.

No More Rhyme

Angst about war and class division
things I brood on cloud my vision,
such as exude from any television.

In nature of all that no good news,
disquiet as much as you can use
blast-intrudes into a piece of peace;
my meagre grasp of sweet solitude
by Life's unfairnesses duly screwed.

Not enough's good in this old world,
no more rhyme - nor a reason I fear.

(Frank)
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Old 07-01-2014, 17:29
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Downbeat I'm afraid.

No More Rhyme


(Frank)
It may be downbeat Frank, but sadly all true........however, as the young Prince Philip once said to the young Queen (someone lipread as they were going past), "Perk up sausage, you're drooping a bit".

Be thankful for small mercies - it's the only way to survive.

You can always pop in, whether you rhyme or not - I do.
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Old 07-01-2014, 17:34
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Just goes to prove that there have always been very clever people in the world since the beginning of time.
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Old 07-01-2014, 17:50
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You can always pop in, whether you rhyme or not - I do.
Thanks Biz I'm back online so to speak after a long time. Glad to see you again.
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Old 07-01-2014, 20:17
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Streetlights glisten on rain slicked streets
People indoors on Facebook or tweets
A night to stay in and read a good book
Or surf the 'net for an new 'you' look
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Old 07-01-2014, 20:19
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things I brood on cloud my vision,
such as exude from any television.
Oh I know that feeling Frank I'm watching less and less news because it gives a distorted picture of life. I like the wordplay of 'a piece of peace' - this is a poem that many would associate with I think.
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Old 07-01-2014, 20:24
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A night to stay in and read a good book
Or surf the 'net for an new 'you' look
I love it Celestine - it's the book for me
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Old 07-01-2014, 20:28
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Just goes to prove that there have always been very clever people in the world since the beginning of time.
One of the things I don't like about this new format Biz, is how the pages look messy. The quoted sections don't stand out enough and the lines dividing the posts are indistinct.

There were more brains in the Neolithic
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Old 08-01-2014, 00:02
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In the street had stood a pleasant tree
It dwelt there tall as long as a little me
Present in that long past of our family
Each's roots settled firm and presently
Adhered as much as mortals ever may
Its timbers withstood winds and decay.
Abiding certainty as others uncertainly
Went on their chosen way our old tree
As my kin took their leave, held ground;
A ton of Christmases hundreds of leaves
On I thought would hang around for more
days of green bag fills, Autumn's chores.
But no oh no! A sawing noise I'd heard
Yet never saw the cause the local hands
had fled, that stump set in plain pavement
bled, to my eyes, from its paid assassins'
saws. Our lovely London plane was slain
peremptorily lumbered off in a corporate
cart to the corporation downtown dump
in her wake, and in this throat, is a lump.
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Old 08-01-2014, 11:41
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In the street had stood a pleasant tree
That strikes a chord Frank. Fortunately when we fought the removal of some trees we were successful. Their fallen leaves are a pest, but otherwise they're a great asset in so many ways.

I've got some great leaf mould.
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