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Old 20-02-2014, 13:52
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Thank you Biz and mr mustard for reading, commenting and the welcome.Very pleased to have found another person who quite likes pusscats.
Flower, I had the 'be careful,' look this morning, but then when I step over him, he stands and of course he gets scrunched.He is going to have very flat feet if he keeps this up.

I am tentatively posting this, I hope that's ok. only two people have ever read anything of mine, it's quite a thing, lots of brave people here,who have posted lovely poems. Hope this is not inappropriate:

A Thong Is So Wrong

Never again, these things are so wrong
What the hell am I doing wearing a thong?
Ouch, I've fallen prey, another victim of this painful trend
Which renders me speechless whenever I bend.
Do other women take lessons,is there a knack
From avoiding the buggers from riding right up your crack?

I'll kill him I will, make him wear them to work,
Why buy these? I was desperate for chocolates, the berk.
'Hey sweetheart,' he shouts,'Come and see what I've bought ya!'
Bloody fantastic, I think, a sexy instrument of torture!
he was so excited with his clever little buy,
I was just scared and I wanted to cry.

He says,'Put'em on, it'll be a right giggle.'
You are having a laugh, all I've done today is wriggle
I just cannot see why this fashion is 'edgy'
What is so good about a permanent wedgie?

No, from now on I'm going comfy and safe
I don't want to be fighting with panties that chafe
So what if my pants are king size and wide?
Who cares? Me and my bits, we will wear them with pride.
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Old 20-02-2014, 19:12
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The thread's rocking and I've only caught up on this page - I hope Sandy pops in, it feels like a strong team at the moment. Onwards, ever onwards
A bit later than expected, but pleased to see you. I'm sure absent friends will pop in sooner or later.


A Thong Is So Wrong
I couldn't agree more. Why don't you buy him one, that'll larn 'im.

I can't write poetry, but I do enjoy reading it. Yours is worthy of Pam Ayers; I can just hear her reciting it with a michievous grin on her face.
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Old 20-02-2014, 19:55
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Sad Situation

Some lowlifes of notorious Benefits Street
known thus for their eponymous attitude
think that a living is owed them as a treat,
shameless the inmates and also its brood.
A breeding place for feckless yet to come,
unemployed men and the unmarried Mum.
A pool of fake tan floods out this bad town
future is orange with pants hanging down,
chav city not pretty, Little Britain writ great
bad attitude on TV a la Kyle: our sad fate.
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Old 20-02-2014, 21:21
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I must admit Frank, I didn't watch it (too depressing), and I feel very fortunate never to have had to rely on benefits - though it's interesting that the state pension is now described as a benefit, even though you've paid tax and national insurance all your working life.

I can see how easily families can slide into dependency and feel entitled, but there must be so many people now who, having lost their job or never being able to get one find it all completely demoralizing.
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Old 21-02-2014, 11:52
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Do other women take lessons, is there a knack
From avoiding the buggers from riding right up your crack?.
From The Library

It's not often people actually do 'lol' at the screen, but I had to stifle several loud bursts of laughter while reading this I don't want the staff to think I'm mad Mrs Goto, you've got to stick around! Like Biz, this reminded me of the marvellous Pam Ayers and it was just as funny as anything she'd written

Women's bits are an eternal mystery to me, so finding anything out is great. A bit like the pyramids in Egypt I guess. One of the funniest pieces ever posted in all four parts of the thread
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Old 21-02-2014, 12:30
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The Elderberry Wine Days

I never undermined you
(That stage came later on),
I wined you and I dined you
Away from your Dear John.

When our affair was hidden
The fruit seemed so divine,
I tasted love forbidden
And elderberry wine.

Each difference in us favoured
An understanding link,
Beneath blue skies we savoured
Our very favourite drink.

Two opposites who blended,
It felt good to belong,
Until, as summer ended
Temptation came along.

I hurt you by not learning,
Transforming into ash
I found my best clothes burning,
My music in the trash.

I guess that made us evens;
Now differences would damn,
You always liked Cat Stevens
While I preferred The Jam.

Despite losing those fine days
With fruit to taste again,
The elderberry wine days
I think of now and then.
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Old 21-02-2014, 12:44
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future is orange with pants hanging down,
chav city not pretty, Little Britain writ great.
Topical and entertaining, I totally agree with your observations here Frank One of the reasons I like your poetry so much is how you add subtle touches. 'The Future's Orange' was a marketing slogan, but you cleverly used it to describe the hideous tans that some chavvy types wear. Poetry can be a powerful spotlight and your batteries are always fully charged.

Much enjoyed
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Old 21-02-2014, 12:50
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I am tentatively posting this, I hope that's ok. only two people have ever read anything of mine, it's quite a thing, lots of brave people here,who have posted lovely poems.
Many have said the same thing here MrsGoto The thing is, the people on the thread are positive in their outlook. There are no intellectuals, thank god. We've only had a few of those since day one - all they did was criticise the material. Feel free to post further poems, even if they're way out ones
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Old 21-02-2014, 12:57
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A bit later than expected, but pleased to see you. I'm sure absent friends will pop in sooner or later. :
Hi Biz I keep thinking of thongs

I'm off shortly, so I'll leave you with a great quote from the back of a Beach Boys album

The smile that you send out
Returns to you

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Old 21-02-2014, 13:43
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The Elderberry Wine Days
..........................

The elderberry wine days
I think of now and then.
I know this is a tragic peom, but those lines fill me with happy nostalgia. Life's not fair is it?

Hi Biz I keep thinking of thongs
You could buy one, then you'll know exactly what MRSgoto means.

I'm off shortly, so I'll leave you with a great quote from the back of a Beach Boys album

The smile that you send out
Returns to you

That's very kind - not so keen on the cat though.
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Old 21-02-2014, 19:50
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Originally Posted by mr. mustard

I hope Sandy pops in
Hello
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Old 21-02-2014, 20:04
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A Thong Is So Wrong

Never again, these things are so wrong
What the hell am I doing wearing a thong?
Ouch, I've fallen prey, another victim of this painful trend
Which renders me speechless whenever I bend.
Do other women take lessons,is there a knack
From avoiding the buggers from riding right up your crack?

I'll kill him I will, make him wear them to work,
Why buy these? I was desperate for chocolates, the berk.
'Hey sweetheart,' he shouts,'Come and see what I've bought ya!'
Bloody fantastic, I think, a sexy instrument of torture!
he was so excited with his clever little buy,
I was just scared and I wanted to cry.

He says,'Put'em on, it'll be a right giggle.'
You are having a laugh, all I've done today is wriggle
I just cannot see why this fashion is 'edgy'
What is so good about a permanent wedgie?

No, from now on I'm going comfy and safe
I don't want to be fighting with panties that chafe
So what if my pants are king size and wide?
Who cares? Me and my bits, we will wear them with pride.
Absolutely fabulous, luckily enough 'for' my OH he has never bought me a thong, I laughed out loud and wiped my eyes at your pain and angst....I even showed my husband, still don't think he quite got it tho .

Keep em coming xx
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Old 21-02-2014, 22:27
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting,mr mustard, Biz and flower, very much appreciated.

I have been reading other peoples poems and wondering how do they come up with such great and varied pieces?

I have been on and come back to read 'The Elderberry Wine Days,'it is so touching, created such a picture in my mind.One I will keep thinking about......if I'm not too distracted by certain underwear.
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Old 22-02-2014, 14:58
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I have been reading other peoples poems and wondering how do they come up with such great and varied pieces?
Hi Mrs Goto, thanks for your comments on the poem My own inspiration in poetry comes in countless ways. Having a wide range of interests helps. I love history, music, art and pop culture. Many of these subjects have appeared in my material. Ordinary people fascinate me too and imagining scenes from their lives can create poetry that readers associate with.

Bernie Taupin, who wrote the bulk of Elton John's best lyrics, is also a massive influence. Their song Elderberry Wine inspired the poem on this page. I could go on, but I won't
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Old 22-02-2014, 15:06
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I know this is a tragic peom, but those lines fill me with happy nostalgia. Life's not fair is it?
Life can be a bummer, but it levels out Biz I'm glad you reacted in that way to the poem, as it does have a vaguely mixed message. No more Sunday posts from me I'm afraid Biz. I'll see you all back here in the library on Monday

Hi Sandy

I even showed my husband, still don't think he quite got it tho .
There's hope for me yet, I got it in one Flower
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Old 22-02-2014, 15:17
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Life can be a bummer, but it levels out Biz I'm glad you reacted in that way to the poem, as it does have a vaguely mixed message. No more Sunday posts from me I'm afraid Biz. I'll see you all back here in the library on Monday
I never know which of your poems are figments of the imagination and which are life experiences. My reaction wasn't to the story told but to my memories of elderberry wine.

Your computer problem must be very frustrating.
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Old 24-02-2014, 09:49
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Your computer problem must be very frustrating.
I only miss the computer now and then Biz For me it's a luxury, not an essential - and I still have access to the poems on my file. I really must try some elderberry wine, I've fancied it ever since I first heard Elton John's song way back in 1973
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Old 24-02-2014, 09:58
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Waiting for the Moon at Callanish

Winds are whistling down the shoreline,
Isle of Lewis, cold sea air,
Every feature has a raw line,
Everything is clearer there.

At the northern tip of Britain
Still a temple does survive,
Callanish, my heart is smitten,
Suddenly I feel alive.

Only one aligned position
In the Hebridean peat,
Waiting for the moon's transition,
For the cycle to complete.

On the distant dark horizon
Low the moon is due to pass,
Nineteen years the wait, all eyes on
Megaliths set in the grass.

Lunar orb begins her duty,
For the faithful she appears
From the peaks of Sleeping Beauty,
Now the sacred ritual nears.

When at last she comes to enter
Brilliant glows the light on view,
Framed within the circle centre,
Streaming down the avenue.

Callanish, the path I'm taking,
Isle of Lewis, cold sea air,
Even when the storms are breaking
Everything is clearer there.


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Old 24-02-2014, 10:08
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In the comments about inspiration I forgot to mention the Trinity - John Betjeman, William Blake and Ted Hughes. Genius x 3

I'm hoping to achieve two big ambitions this year. Getting the big book of poetry out is number one. It's going to take time, but the running order's already coming together. Hundreds of poems need sifting and polishing, so I'm thinking in terms of a November release date. If it comes out earlier though, great The other ambition is the pilgrimage, at last, to Callanish. It's a biggie, a sort of Stonehenge of the north. Being there is going to be cosmic and I know it has to happen. I've already bought my rucksack

A big thank you to Julian Cope, whose book on ancient sites is beyond all. His poems throughout the vast tome are pretty good too
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Old 24-02-2014, 16:00
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mr. mustard-I looked up Callanish and a good few of the images which came up were moonlit. I love 'Waiting for the Moon at Callanish,' so atmospheric, just as the actual place appears to be, if the pictures I saw are anything to go by. How beautiful.

I do hope you get your book completed and polished asap-I am very interested and I can imagine the poems you will be inspired to write while there, at Callanish.I do hope the pilgrimage happens.
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Old 24-02-2014, 17:02
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I really must try some elderberry wine, I've fancied it ever since I first heard Elton John's song way back in 1973
I've just listened to the song, and must admit to never having heard it before.

Waiting for the Moon at Callanish

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I'm hoping to achieve two big ambitions this year.
Make sure you time your visit right - I'm sure you will.

Like MRSgoto I'm looking forward to the new volume.
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Old 24-02-2014, 17:24
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Baby in a Pram

You rattle with selfish relish,
centre of your universe,
others mere satellites,
floating to your needs,
to be pulled down,
like balloons,
at the twitch of your demands.

You soak up their goodness,
reflecting, with no return.
A stained bundle of unconditional worth.

And while excuses are made for you,
your skittering mind moves from instinct to control.
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Old 24-02-2014, 19:32
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Aaahhh Scottie, that takes me back. I remember it well.
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Old 25-02-2014, 00:58
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Baby in a Pram

A stained bundle of unconditional worth.
A great poem Scottie and a line which says it all.

Sorry I haven't been keeping up with the thread so much.


elemental my dear.

thinking out loud
to the wavering crowd
may upset one or two
who accept the old clues

my imagination
turns to vegetation
suitably grown
now i am alone

my buildings aspire
to frankly enquire
as to where we are now
furthermore how

can i get it across
faith is gathering moss
it ain't transcendental
it's elemental.
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Old 25-02-2014, 01:11
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elemental my dear.

thinking out loud
to the wavering crowd
may upset one or two
who accept the old clues

my imagination
turns to vegetation
suitably grown
now i am alone

my buildings aspire
to frankly enquire
as to where we are now
furthermore how

can i get it across
faith is gathering moss
it ain't transcendental
it's elemental.
Thought provoking arhiver x
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