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Old 27-09-2014, 16:32
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Changes...?

Dreamers dream,
writers write,
hope lives on.
People aspire,
lives forge on,
the world keeps spinning.
Society adapts,
technology evolves,
mother nature fights back.
Time passes by,
generations succeed,
changes come and go.
Somehow still,
truths stay put,
certainties remain,
does anything ever truly change?.
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Old 27-09-2014, 19:38
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Thanks for sharing. This poem was enjoyable and brilliant at the same time!
Thanks

THE JOURNEY TO BEYOND


I wipe away a lonely tear
And wonder where I've been.
I pray to God, and say amen,
Then climb safely into bed,
I don't want that to happen again,
It plays havoc with my head.

(c)
Don't eat cheese before you go to bed
Good read Wizzy is it based on a real experience or imagination ?
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Old 27-09-2014, 19:49
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It Hurts.

It pains me to say
I look away
when I see our bad
incredibly sad.

And then there's the waste.
Our world defaced.
Man to be known
as who killed his own.
Excellent poem and yes it's very sad

On the Allotment in Late September

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Have you got your winter onions in yet ?

You are so right when you say 'timeless time' when spending hours among the plants and vegetables. The world disappears doesn't it.

Gently

Sauntering by
on a hazy day
looking all around
stood a lowly man
amongst a crowd
feeling all at bay
there you go gently
said the nightingale
bless you, sneezes away
What a lovely gentle verse.
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Old 27-09-2014, 20:01
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'does anything ever truly change?.
Well if it is true that energy can neither be created or destroyed, deep down nothing changes except how it presents itself to us onlookers from day to day.

I like that you chose to put a question at the end of your poem as it invites the reader to think about its subject long after reading it
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Old 27-09-2014, 20:03
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Well if it is true that energy can neither be created or destroyed, deep down nothing changes except how it presents itself to us onlookers from day to day.

I like that you chose to put a question at the end of your poem as it invites the reader to think about its subject long after reading it
I was trying to do something a bit different and maintain the rhythm of the rest of the piece. Not sure if it worked?.
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Old 27-09-2014, 20:10
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I was trying to do something a bit different and maintain the rhythm of the rest of the piece. Not sure if it worked?.
It was easy to read and flowed well from one line to the next , so yes I think so.
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Old 27-09-2014, 20:22
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On the Allotment in Late September

Peaceful, bar a scattering of chattering birds,
I stand with summer at my back, penknife in hand
To slice the slack knots of twine neatly tied in spring,
Dropping curls of string onto leaves of yellow-green.
The unwieldy wheelbarrow awaits the remains
As I strip runner beans back to their bamboo bones.
Timeless time, so contentedly spent, my head bent
In concentration. And yet, the spare autumn air
Nurses wisps of wistfulness: a season passing.
But here on the sun-bleached bench lie pods like knuckles,
Knobbly, and fat with beans mottled purple and black.
The promise of life curled inside each sturdy seed
Reminds me that nature’s cycle spins silently
As the jackdaws caw in quarrelsome harmony.
I really like this one Loz. Particularly the "unwieldy wheelbarrow" and "wisps of wistfulness".

So visual too with all the colours of autumn.

Thanks.

@ belly button: Thanks for your comment on mine. So many good ones recently - I had to slip one in somewhere.
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Old 27-09-2014, 20:27
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It was easy to read and flowed well from one line to the next , so yes I think so.
Thanks I might have separated parts into different paragraphs perhaps but otherwise I guess its ok. It was just an experimental thing
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Old 27-09-2014, 22:26
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Good read Wizzy is it based on a real experience or imagination ?
The Journey to Beyond is a poem I wrote recently as I have been reflecting a lot upon my mother's death. She had MS and died of pneumonia when she was 54. This happened in 2003. But lately due to things happening in the world that are far from nice and family members going through rough times, my head has been all over the place. One of the saddest things I encountered was when my mum lost her faith in God. She always had a strong faith and when she got MS and became increasingly ill, she said that God wasn't real. She felt foolish and cheated for believing in him. She died thinking that. It was heartbreaking. So, Journey to Beyond is about confusion, sadness and the questioning of my faith. I so want God to tell me that he's real. So many bad things happen in the world. But, the last verse is basically me accepting that God is real and during the poem I am convinced by seeing those I loved and lost in my mind. It has an optimistic, albeit rather bizarre ending. It also deals with the depression I encountered during the few years following my mother's death. In my mind she was a truly amazing woman and I still love her dearly.
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Old 27-09-2014, 22:30
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Changes...?

Dreamers dream,
writers write,
hope lives on.
People aspire,
lives forge on,
the world keeps spinning.
Society adapts,
technology evolves,
mother nature fights back.
Time passes by,
generations succeed,
changes come and go.
Somehow still,
truths stay put,
certainties remain,
does anything ever truly change?.
Your superb poem typically summarises life.

changes come and go.
Somehow still,
truths stay put,
certainties remain,
does anything ever truly change?

How true is that? Definetely something we can all relate to.
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Old 27-09-2014, 22:30
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The Journey to Beyond is a poem I wrote recently as I have been reflecting a lot upon my mother's death. She had MS and died of pneumonia when she was 54. This happened in 2003. But lately due to things happening in the world that are far from nice and family members going through rough times, my head has been all over the place. One of the saddest things I encountered was when my mum lost her faith in God. She always had a strong faith and when she got MS and became increasingly ill, she said that God wasn't real. She felt foolish and cheated for believing in him. She died thinking that. It was heartbreaking. So, Journey to Beyond is about confusion, sadness and the questioning of my faith. I so want God to tell me that he's real. So many bad things happen in the world. But, the last verse is basically me accepting that God is real and during the poem I am convinced by seeing those I loved and lost in my mind. It has an optimistic, albeit rather bizarre ending. It also deals with the depression I encountered during the few years following my mother's death. In my mind she was a truly amazing woman and I still love her dearly.
I'm so sorry to hear that that must have been tough.
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Old 27-09-2014, 22:33
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Your superb poem typically summarises life.

changes come and go.
Somehow still,
truths stay put,
certainties remain,
does anything ever truly change?

How true is that? Definetely something we can all relate to.
Thank you
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Old 27-09-2014, 22:41
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I'm so sorry to hear that that must have been tough.
It was the dark ages in my life! But, the love and memories of someone you lose gives you the strength and determination to continue. Thank you for commenting.

Poetry is a wonderful way of expressing myself. It releases anger, sadness and frustration on paper without being vocal and physical.
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Old 27-09-2014, 22:53
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It was the dark ages in my life! But, the love and memories of someone you lose gives you the strength and determination to continue. Thank you for commenting.

Poetry is a wonderful way of expressing myself. It releases anger, sadness and frustration on paper without being vocal and physical.
Yes, its a good way of expressing things that might be difficult to put across otherwise.
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Old 27-09-2014, 22:57
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Yes, its a good way of expressing things that might be difficult to put across otherwise.
I just wish normal folk would 'get it'!
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Old 27-09-2014, 23:22
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I just wish normal folk would 'get it'!
What your writing about, you mean? or the fact it can be easier to write about things than talk about them, sometimes?.
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Old 28-09-2014, 09:17
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The Journey to Beyond is a poem I wrote recently as I have been reflecting a lot upon my mother's death. She had MS and died of pneumonia when she was 54. This happened in 2003. But lately due to things happening in the world that are far from nice and family members going through rough times, my head has been all over the place. One of the saddest things I encountered was when my mum lost her faith in God. She always had a strong faith and when she got MS and became increasingly ill, she said that God wasn't real. She felt foolish and cheated for believing in him. She died thinking that. It was heartbreaking. So, Journey to Beyond is about confusion, sadness and the questioning of my faith. I so want God to tell me that he's real. So many bad things happen in the world. But, the last verse is basically me accepting that God is real and during the poem I am convinced by seeing those I loved and lost in my mind. It has an optimistic, albeit rather bizarre ending. It also deals with the depression I encountered during the few years following my mother's death. In my mind she was a truly amazing woman and I still love her dearly.
Thank you for explaining the emotions behind your poem. I'll read it again with better understanding.
It's good you had an amazing mum
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Old 28-09-2014, 10:18
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What your writing about, you mean? or the fact it can be easier to write about things than talk about them, sometimes?.
The fact that I use poetry to express myself. Some people think I'm a bit odd! They also occasionally find it hard to understand what I'm writing about because I tend to hide the real subject amongst fantasy or imagery. But I have and can write straightforward poems, it depends on the mood I'm in!
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Old 28-09-2014, 11:46
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The fact that I use poetry to express myself. Some people think I'm a bit odd! They also occasionally find it hard to understand what I'm writing about because I tend to hide the real subject amongst fantasy or imagery. But I have and can write straightforward poems, it depends on the mood I'm in!
I can relate to that. It doesn't make you odd at all, just because they perhaps can't read between the lines?. I should probably do more straightforward poems myself.
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Old 28-09-2014, 14:08
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Sunday night


Sat with a pen
stunted ink expression
words, tip of my tongue

never quite surfacing
frustration flows
ticking clock companion

candle lit
computers broke
cd plays a song

red wine
3rd glass
musical memories promoted

and i miss you still.
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Old 28-09-2014, 17:59
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I just had to pop in to say how wonderfully talented you all are, and how delighted I am that my ambition has been realized.

Looking forward to the book Musty.
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Old 28-09-2014, 18:12
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I just had to pop in to say how wonderfully talented you all are, and how delighted I am that my ambition has been realized.

Looking forward to the book Musty.
What ambition is that?
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Old 28-09-2014, 19:58
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I just had to pop in to say how wonderfully talented you all are, and how delighted I am that my ambition has been realized.

Looking forward to the book Musty.
Hello Biz !!!

How lovely to see a post from you.
Hadn't been here much myself until recently and saw that you had gone from this thread.
I do hope all is well and glad that your intriguing ambition has come to fruition.
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Old 28-09-2014, 20:10
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Hello Izzy and BB. My ambition was to see all you talented poets posting and interacting with each other. I think my constant presence must have been a deterrent because the thread is much better populated now. Long may it continue.

It's so long since I posted that I've almost forgotten how but life does get in the way sometimes.
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Old 28-09-2014, 20:30
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Hello Izzy and BB. My ambition was to see all you talented poets posting and interacting with each other. I think my constant presence must have been a deterrent because the thread is much better populated now. Long may it continue.

It's so long since I posted that I've almost forgotten how but life does get in the way sometimes.
Don't be unfair on yourself. I only somewhat recently came across this thread. I might have seen it in the years before but presumed it to be a bit of a clique thread, as im pretty sure I only shared my writing here fairly recently. Its nice to see various people sharing their work here

I could probably do with life getting in the way more - as long as its in a positive way, rather than a negative one (if that maes any sense).
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