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Changes...?
Dreamers dream, writers write, hope lives on. People aspire, lives forge on, the world keeps spinning. Society adapts, technology evolves, mother nature fights back. Time passes by, generations succeed, changes come and go. Somehow still, truths stay put, certainties remain, does anything ever truly change?. |
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Thanks for sharing. This poem was enjoyable and brilliant at the same time!
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THE JOURNEY TO BEYOND
I wipe away a lonely tear And wonder where I've been. I pray to God, and say amen, Then climb safely into bed, I don't want that to happen again, It plays havoc with my head. (c) ![]() Good read Wizzy is it based on a real experience or imagination ? |
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It Hurts.
It pains me to say I look away when I see our bad incredibly sad. And then there's the waste. Our world defaced. Man to be known as who killed his own. ![]() Quote:
On the Allotment in Late September
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Gently
Sauntering by on a hazy day looking all around stood a lowly man amongst a crowd feeling all at bay there you go gently said the nightingale bless you, sneezes away |
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Changes...?
'does anything ever truly change?. I like that you chose to put a question at the end of your poem as it invites the reader to think about its subject long after reading it
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Well if it is true that energy can neither be created or destroyed, deep down nothing changes except how it presents itself to us onlookers from day to day.
I like that you chose to put a question at the end of your poem as it invites the reader to think about its subject long after reading it ![]() |
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I was trying to do something a bit different and maintain the rhythm of the rest of the piece. Not sure if it worked?.
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On the Allotment in Late September
Peaceful, bar a scattering of chattering birds, I stand with summer at my back, penknife in hand To slice the slack knots of twine neatly tied in spring, Dropping curls of string onto leaves of yellow-green. The unwieldy wheelbarrow awaits the remains As I strip runner beans back to their bamboo bones. Timeless time, so contentedly spent, my head bent In concentration. And yet, the spare autumn air Nurses wisps of wistfulness: a season passing. But here on the sun-bleached bench lie pods like knuckles, Knobbly, and fat with beans mottled purple and black. The promise of life curled inside each sturdy seed Reminds me that nature’s cycle spins silently As the jackdaws caw in quarrelsome harmony. ![]() So visual too with all the colours of autumn. Thanks. @ belly button: Thanks for your comment on mine. So many good ones recently - I had to slip one in somewhere.
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It was easy to read and flowed well from one line to the next , so yes I think so.
I might have separated parts into different paragraphs perhaps but otherwise I guess its ok. It was just an experimental thing
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Thanks
![]() Don't eat cheese before you go to bed ![]() Good read Wizzy is it based on a real experience or imagination ? |
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Changes...?
Dreamers dream, writers write, hope lives on. People aspire, lives forge on, the world keeps spinning. Society adapts, technology evolves, mother nature fights back. Time passes by, generations succeed, changes come and go. Somehow still, truths stay put, certainties remain, does anything ever truly change?. changes come and go. Somehow still, truths stay put, certainties remain, does anything ever truly change? How true is that? Definetely something we can all relate to.
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The Journey to Beyond is a poem I wrote recently as I have been reflecting a lot upon my mother's death. She had MS and died of pneumonia when she was 54. This happened in 2003. But lately due to things happening in the world that are far from nice and family members going through rough times, my head has been all over the place. One of the saddest things I encountered was when my mum lost her faith in God. She always had a strong faith and when she got MS and became increasingly ill, she said that God wasn't real. She felt foolish and cheated for believing in him. She died thinking that. It was heartbreaking. So, Journey to Beyond is about confusion, sadness and the questioning of my faith. I so want God to tell me that he's real. So many bad things happen in the world. But, the last verse is basically me accepting that God is real and during the poem I am convinced by seeing those I loved and lost in my mind. It has an optimistic, albeit rather bizarre ending. It also deals with the depression I encountered during the few years following my mother's death. In my mind she was a truly amazing woman and I still love her dearly.
that must have been tough.
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Your superb poem typically summarises life.
changes come and go. Somehow still, truths stay put, certainties remain, does anything ever truly change? How true is that? Definetely something we can all relate to. ![]()
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I'm so sorry to hear that
that must have been tough.Poetry is a wonderful way of expressing myself. It releases anger, sadness and frustration on paper without being vocal and physical. |
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It was the dark ages in my life! But, the love and memories of someone you lose gives you the strength and determination to continue. Thank you for commenting.
Poetry is a wonderful way of expressing myself. It releases anger, sadness and frustration on paper without being vocal and physical. |
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Yes, its a good way of expressing things that might be difficult to put across otherwise.
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I just wish normal folk would 'get it'!
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The Journey to Beyond is a poem I wrote recently as I have been reflecting a lot upon my mother's death. She had MS and died of pneumonia when she was 54. This happened in 2003. But lately due to things happening in the world that are far from nice and family members going through rough times, my head has been all over the place. One of the saddest things I encountered was when my mum lost her faith in God. She always had a strong faith and when she got MS and became increasingly ill, she said that God wasn't real. She felt foolish and cheated for believing in him. She died thinking that. It was heartbreaking. So, Journey to Beyond is about confusion, sadness and the questioning of my faith. I so want God to tell me that he's real. So many bad things happen in the world. But, the last verse is basically me accepting that God is real and during the poem I am convinced by seeing those I loved and lost in my mind. It has an optimistic, albeit rather bizarre ending. It also deals with the depression I encountered during the few years following my mother's death. In my mind she was a truly amazing woman and I still love her dearly.
It's good you had an amazing mum
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What your writing about, you mean? or the fact it can be easier to write about things than talk about them, sometimes?.
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The fact that I use poetry to express myself. Some people think I'm a bit odd! They also occasionally find it hard to understand what I'm writing about because I tend to hide the real subject amongst fantasy or imagery. But I have and can write straightforward poems, it depends on the mood I'm in!
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Sunday night
Sat with a pen stunted ink expression words, tip of my tongue never quite surfacing frustration flows ticking clock companion candle lit computers broke cd plays a song red wine 3rd glass musical memories promoted and i miss you still. |
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I just had to pop in to say how wonderfully talented you all are, and how delighted I am that my ambition has been realized.
Looking forward to the book Musty.
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I just had to pop in to say how wonderfully talented you all are, and how delighted I am that my ambition has been realized.
Looking forward to the book Musty. ![]()
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I just had to pop in to say how wonderfully talented you all are, and how delighted I am that my ambition has been realized.
Looking forward to the book Musty. ![]() ![]() How lovely to see a post from you. Hadn't been here much myself until recently and saw that you had gone from this thread. I do hope all is well and glad that your intriguing ambition has come to fruition. |
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Hello Izzy and BB.
My ambition was to see all you talented poets posting and interacting with each other. I think my constant presence must have been a deterrent because the thread is much better populated now. Long may it continue.It's so long since I posted that I've almost forgotten how but life does get in the way sometimes. |
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Hello Izzy and BB.
My ambition was to see all you talented poets posting and interacting with each other. I think my constant presence must have been a deterrent because the thread is much better populated now. Long may it continue.It's so long since I posted that I've almost forgotten how but life does get in the way sometimes. I could probably do with life getting in the way more - as long as its in a positive way, rather than a negative one (if that maes any sense). |
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