Originally Posted by eggshell:
“You're being obtuse here....you know darn well as a magician that this was seven shades of naff.
The routine blending mind reading and magic was poorly thought out and poorly executed.
The shoe piece (ignoring the camera slip) had no impact...none at all and was a silly idea.
And Jamie had no personality.”
In this case, I have to agree with you on all counts there!
His routine wasn't very well thought out at all and the big reveal died a death as he put no drama into it. Just mumbling "ok, do it" for them to drop the cloth was almost criminal!
Getting a lighter out before she told him the word on her card was mistake 101 of magic: He is at least meant to pretend to be doing what he says, not making it obvious that he already knew what was on the card. That alone is a criminal basic mistake of amateurs. Stagecraft is knowing what you are trying to present to the viewers and getting it across, not killing all doubt stone dead.
The shoe bit was as limp as a week old lettuce and should have been replaced with another but far better production.
The last bit should have gone: (Straight of the top of my head)
Turn to Simon: "Now I hope your card says a bunch of flowers and not something utterly ridiculous" (This reinforces what he should at least be trying to get across, that he doesn't know what is on the cards.)
Turn and walk upstage and draw a "?" on the sheet. (Again he is not meant to know so that is why he is drawing a Question Mark - It makes sense) Raise cloth.
Walk downstage and address Simon with some bloody dramatic energy "NOW! Simon, FOR THE FIRST TIME... TELL US WHAT IS SAYS ON YOUR CARD...."
Simon: "HELICOPTER!"
Dramatic pause with look of horror as if to say ' A bloody helicopter? are you SERIOUS?!"
Turn and run like mad to the centre of the cloth, grab it and dramatically pull it off whilst telling "NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!!"
Drama, suspense, energy.
Now that's just very standard stagecraft off the top of my head yet he couldn't get it that good with weeks of thinking and working it. If he had started with my very basic ideas and added to that, he may have had something that made sense and worked.
And if he couldn't iron out or see what was seriously wrong with his act after working on it, then any hope that he will ever get it, is highly unlikely.