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Old 11-10-2015, 10:50
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I've just had a idea for a brand new Villain for Eastenders: Zeb Wyatt.

I may warn you now, folks, this guy isn't like any normal soap villain. He's not pantomime like Nick Cotton, not a Anti-hero like Brendan Brady, and not a big mouth like Warren Fox, no, he's incredibly evil.

He's played by Steve Coogan. That might be pushing it a bit, but hear me out.

Zeb is first seen walking the streets of Albert Square, where he immediately crosses paths with Patrick Trueman. He is revealed to be a racist as he racially abuses Patrick after he refuses to allow Zeb to not pay for a pint of Milk. Patrick orders him out the shop, whilst threatening to ring the police.

That night, Patrick is walking back to the B&B from the Queen Vic when suddenly a gang of thugs jump him and beat him senseless. He is then bundled into a van, and it's revealed that Zeb is behind all this. Patrick is then seen in a abandoned Slaughterhouse, where Zeb tortures him and cuts off most of his skin. It's incredibly horrifying to watch, and Zeb ends this by striping Patrick naked, dousing him in Petrol and setting him on fire.

The next day, Patrick is dumped outside the B&B, naked and his entire body burnt to smithereens. Denise and Kim are horrified, and when Patrick tells them that Zeb is responsible, they are livid. Denise confronts Zeb, demanding that he apologises for what he did.

Zeb, however, refuses to even consider it, and threatens Denise with the same if she doesn't back off. Zeb then begins a violent and disturbing hate campaign against Patrick, which basically consists of him ordering thugs to smash up the shop and B&B. Kim is violently mugged in the street by another gang of Zeb's thugs, Denise's car gets stolen and eventually crushed, and Patrick's life is made a living hell by Zeb.

After a few days of violence and threats, Patrick cannot take it anymore; He attempts to ring the police, but Zeb breaks into the B&B and attacks him, eventually breaking his right arm. Zeb's attack on Patrick is so violent that most of it happens off-screen, but ends with Patrick covered in blood, stripped naked and crying his eyes out. Denise and Kim find him and immediately make the decision for Patrick to leave the square in order to keep him well away from Zeb. In heartfelt scenes, Patrick leaves the square in a Taxi, much to the joy of Zeb, so smirks as he's driven away.

With Patrick gone, Zeb focuses his attentions on Ricky Butcher, who's recently returned to the square. Ricky is struggling for cash, so Zeb steps in and offers him a job as a Drug dealer. Ricky immediately turns it down flat, making it very clear that he isn't interested in getting involved in Zeb's world. But Zeb isn't impressed, and orders Ricky's son, Liam Butcher, to be attacked outside his school. Liam is then viciously beaten up as he's walking home from school, much to the horror of Ricky. Feeling desperate, Ricky accepts Zeb's job offer.

Part 2 coming up very soon.
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Old 11-10-2015, 10:53
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What a stupid idea
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Old 11-10-2015, 11:09
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Why is it stupid?
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Old 11-10-2015, 12:10
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Ha ha, this is amazing. Although why is Patrick repeatedly stripped naked by Zeb? And could he feasibly phone the police if his arm had been flayed and then burnt to a crisp?
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Old 11-10-2015, 12:16
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A great idea for a horror movie, not sure about EastEnders at 7:30/8:00pm though.
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Old 11-10-2015, 12:19
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I can't buy the idea of Steve Coogan in the role, but i kinda like it
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Old 11-10-2015, 12:22
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Weird, just weird.
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Old 11-10-2015, 12:30
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Weird, just weird. I don't remember being this weird when I was a youngster of 16 ...........
Nothing wrong with a bit of 'weird'
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Old 11-10-2015, 12:39
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I stopped reading when I saw the name Steve Coogan.
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Old 11-10-2015, 15:15
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Come on guys, this guy has potential to be the best soap villain of all time. Stay with me.
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Old 11-10-2015, 15:20
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I think it is truly terrible and actually quite disturbing.

I also think it should be in the soap appreciation section where fan fic goes but this actually may be too terrible for that.

I can't offer anything constructive to make it better other than delete the whole thing and start again! keep the name maybe
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Old 11-10-2015, 15:23
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As this is basically a fanfic, I would recommend putting 'part 2' in The Games Section
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Old 11-10-2015, 15:31
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OP - do your parents know you write this sort of stuff on the internet? If you were my child I'd take you to a psychologist pronto as it really is very disturbing.
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Old 11-10-2015, 16:47
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I do like the idea but it's not eastenders, it could be a new late nite soap airing at 10:00 pm and surely Patrick would be dead having his face ripped off and set alight and for that denise
Only wanted an apology lol and I wouldnt wanna see Patrick naked.
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Old 11-10-2015, 17:21
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Bobby Beale, put that IPad down and go to your room immediately!
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Old 11-10-2015, 17:23
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OP - do your parents know you write this sort of stuff on the internet? If you were my child I'd take you to a psychologist pronto as it really is very disturbing.
Disturbing doesn't even come close!


The OP always posts sick ideas. I'm surprised he didn't have Patrick raped in this like he does in his past ideas.

Anyways Op! Post part 2 for the lulz.
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Old 11-10-2015, 17:34
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Disturbing doesn't even come close!


The OP always posts sick ideas. I'm surprised he didn't have Patrick raped in this like he does in his past ideas.

Anyways Op! Post part 2 for the lulz.
he did and the mods moved it to the games room
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Old 11-10-2015, 18:22
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he did and the mods moved it to the games room
You are a star!

Thanks!
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Old 11-10-2015, 18:31
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I know the price of milk is a bit out of hand these days, but Zeb's response seems a little strong.
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Old 11-10-2015, 19:21
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I know the price of milk is a bit out of hand these days, but Zeb's response seems a little strong.
Maybe Patrick stopped him from buying eggs aswell lol.
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Old 11-10-2015, 19:28
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An interesting storyline, and relevant because of the migrant crisis. But a few points.

1. The execution is a bit too distressing for pre watershed.
2. drug dealers are rarely racist, they would be destroying their own income source by cutting off a third of their prospective clients, so the drug dealer would need to be someone else in the gang or a separate story.
3. Ricky won't be back until Janine returns and buys the vic, and thats not for ages yet. So perhaps someone like Fatboy, Jay, Mick etc could have Ricky's story.
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Old 11-10-2015, 19:36
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How did Patrick survive that ordeal?
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Old 11-10-2015, 19:39
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Nice too see you got the male rape fixation out of your head at least.
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Old 11-10-2015, 19:42
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Bobby Beale, put that IPad down and go to your room immediately!


Patrick wouldn't have survived if he had his skin cut off then burnt after being doused in petrol...

This is a worse idea than Babe & Elaine being a One True Pairing
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Old 11-10-2015, 20:00
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I just find this a bit weird. Steve Coogan would never be in a soap

Aha!
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