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EE Birthday My Script
So heres my script but a few things I have made up
All the Wikks have arrived and Kevin has stated dating Naomi's mum Grace played by Diane Parish Joe's daughter has arrived Shelly, with he boyfriend Colin Peggy has revieled to Phil a secret boyfriend Barry King and he has a daugher Lauren King Grant and his family have arrived Gus and Juley's parent Lucy and Ron Smith have arrived and Ruby and Juley are back together So here we go Eastenders Birthday Episode Scene 1 – A car pulls up in the market you see two heels walk into the fowler back yard and a hand knocks the door Sharon – Hello Pauline Pauline – Sharon you made it Sharon – Well you need a bridesmaid since shell aint coming don’t you Pauline – O Sharon Scene 2 There’s a knock on the door at the vic Peggy comes from the back of the Vic and heads towards the door Peggy – Coming just a sec She opens the door and honeys sitting on the kerb of the pavement crying Peggy sits down next to her, Honey – Morning Peggy – what’s up darlin? Honey – My, my, my dad died last night Peggy – And Billy let you come to work, wait till I see him Honey – No he doesn’t know I’m here, he’s still asleep Peggy – Go home darlin your better there Honey – But what about the wedding Peggy – It’s Ok we’ll cope, go on its freezing out here Honey stands up and slowly walks across the square, Peggy goes back inside the Vic Scene 3 Sharon, Dot and Pauline in the fowlers living room Dot – Are you looking forward to today Pauline – Yeah of course, I’m just so nervous Sharon – That’s normal Pauline walks over and opens a drawer and pulls out a box and sits down at the table they open the box Sharon picks one a picture out of Den, Angie, Pauline and Arthur, Dot lifts one of Lou and Pete and Pauline lifts one of Sharon, Shell and Mark. Sharon – I miss them so much Pauline – I still can’t believe there all gone Dot – these are great pictures Martin walks in Sharon – Morning Son Martin – Sharon it’s good to see you, tea anybody Dot – O yes please Sharon – would murder for a cup Martin – Jamie Sharon – I never meant Martin – No I was supposed to meet Sonia at his grave yesterday Sonia walks in Sonia – What happened yesterday Martin – Sorry I forgot Sonia – If you didn’t want to go you could of said you promised me Martin – I did forget I just remembered Sonia – save it for someone who cares She storms out the Fowlers Martin – So mum tea Pauline stands up Pauline – I need to be somewhere Pauline walks out Martin - Mum Scene 4 – Juley walks into his bedroom with a tray of food, ruby’s in bed. Juley – Made you breakfast Ruby – Great, but we need to tell him Juley – What today Ruby – well yeah Juley – If you’re sure Ruby – Yeah today. Scene 5 – Pauline’s sitting on Arthur’s bench, Martin comes across the square and sits next to her. Martin – Thought I’d find you here Pauline – Where else would I be? Martin – Looks like you’re on another planet Pauline – I’m just thinking Martin – Well that’s a first Pauline – Oi you respect wouldn’t go a miss Martin – Just messing with you Pauline – I was thinking about what Arthur would have thought of me getting remarried, he would of hated it I was his woman not Joes I can’t go through with it. Martin – Ok what did he care about your happiness, are you happy with Joe Pauline – Yeah of course Martin – Well then he would want the marriage to go ahead then Pauline – Yeah he would, thanks martin Martin – well are we going back in the house I’m freezing out here Pauline – of course They walk back towards the fowlers but stop when they here Dawn – Martin wait, I was just coming to see you, morning Pauline good luck today Pauline – Are you coming to the ceremony then Dawn – well I haven’t been invited yet Martin – I meant to ask you Dawn – Well ask me then Martin – Would you like to be my date to my mothers wedding Dawn – Em No Kidding yes I would love to be your date well that’s that sorted Next thing I don’t want to leave today I’m staying Martin – Good Dawn – What Martin – Cause I’m staying to Pauline – Yeah Scene 6 – In the wicks kitchen, Kevin, Pat and Carly are sitting around the Kitchen table, Deano is making breakfast Deano – It will be ready in a minute Kevin stands up Kevin – let me do it Deano – no its ok I can do it Kevin tries to take the frying pan of Deano who wont let go of it, Deano burns himself Deano – A look what you’ve done now Kevin – Sorry Deano – but you not are you that’s my point, this is why I came to walford in the first place, that’s why I told pat you where dead you have been like this since mum died Kevin – It’s not my fault you’re a Pathetic Little boy, I wish had nothing to do with me; you’re a disgrace of my family Deano. Deano – Is that what you really think of me Kevin – Yeah, No I don’t know Deano – Forget it dad I don’t want to know Deano walks down the hall and leaves the house after slamming the door Pat – That was a bit harsh wasn’t it Carly – Yeah it was Kevin – o shut up the two of you Pat – I think the sausages are ready Kevin and Carly look at her Pat – What I’m hungry Scene 7 – Garry, Minty, Naomi and Keith’s Flat, All sitting on the sofa. Garry – So any of you going to this wedding Naomi – I am Minty stands up and runs out the room screaming Minty – I’m gonna be sick Keith – I’ll stay and look after him Naomi – (Mumbles) Poor Minty Garry – Now are you sure you can look after yourself let alone Minty Keith – Very Funny Scene 8 – In the market the Wedding cars drive of, Sonia and Mo are waving them off Sonia – Hope she has a good day Mo – Poor Joe Sonia – What do you mean? Mo – Well he’s gonna be stuck to that old cow know Sonia – Mo you nasty sod Mo – That’s me darlin Scene 9 – There’s a knock at the door at the Wicks Pat goes to answer the door Pat opens the door Steven – Gran Pat – Steven Son Steven – Can I stay here for a few days. Scene 10 – The Wedding Music starts to play, Joe looks up the aisle and sees Pauline she reaches up the aisle and stands beside Joe. He whispers Joe – Hello Darlin Scene 11 – Peggy, Phil and Grant standing outside the pub, putting up a banner saying congratulations and Johnny is coming across the square. Phil and Grant are both on stepladders. Peggy – Higher Phil Phil – There Peggy – Lower a bit Johnny – No higher Grant – butt out Johnny – ok Johnny kicks Phil’s stepladder away and he falls to the ground. Grant jumps off his stepladder and follows Johnny into the market. He holds his fist up to Johnny’s face. Grant – You want this Peggy – leave it Grant Grant walks over to Phil and helps him up Grant – You alright Phil – yes I will be Peggy – Now lets get this banner done Scene 12 – Back in the Church Priest – Do you take Joe Macer as your lawful wedded Husband? Pauline – I do Scene 13 – Back outside the Vic Peggy – Perfect Grant – Thank the lord Phil – Pint Grant Grant – Yip Scene 14 – Back in the Church Priest – Do you take Pauline Fowler as your lawful wedded Wife? Joe – I do Priest – You may now Kiss the bride They Kiss and the people watching Cheer Scene 15 – Outside the Church, people throwing confetti over the couple, people taking pictures Joe – I love you Mrs Macer Pauline – I love you two Mr Macer, but I’m staying as Mrs Fowler is that ok Joe – of course darling Joe walks over to where Shelly, Colin and Martin are standing Shelly – Dad I’m so proud of you Colin – Yeah well done mate Martin – You will look after her won’t you? Joe – No I’m going to beat her up in stuff Martin – That isn’t a funny subject Joe – Sorry of course I look after her I love her Scene 16 – Billy comes across the square and sees Honey sitting on Arthur’s bench but Lil Mo stops him. Lil Mo – Please Billy just give us one more go Please Bill I love you Billy – Well you never when you were with Alfie did you Lil Mo – Please Billy Billy – No Mo it’s over between us I love Honey now and I need to see her and your in my way. Lil Mo – So it is over Billy – yes Lil Mo – Well I’m going to leave then She Kisses him on the cheek Billy – And that was for Lil Mo – being my prince Charmin, I’ll always love you Billy Mitchell say goodbye to Honey for me She heads over to the Slater’s Billy sits next to Honey Honey – I miss him so much Bill Billy – Of course you do Honey – I love you, you know Billy – I love you two He gets onto one knee Billy – Sue Edwards will you marry me Lil Mo – No Billy Billy – where did you come from Lil Mo runs off to the Vic Honey – Yes I will Billy – Yes Juley walks past Juley – Alright Billy-boy Billy – Honey’s agreed to be my wife Juley – I thought you were married to Maureen Billy – Yeah but Juley – Billy the bigamist Juley walks off to the Allen’s Billy – what’s his problem? Scene 17 – Ruby answers the door Juley – Is he in a good mood? Ruby – Hopefully Juley – Are you ready? Ruby – Dad can you come down please Johnny - just a minute Ruby – In here They go into the living room Johnny walks in Johnny – What’s he doing here Ruby – we need to tell you something Johnny – what the hell is going on Scene 18 – In the Vic, Honey and Billy walk in Peggy – You don’t need to come in Hon Billy – Were engaged Peggy – What Billy – Honey and Me are Peggy – Yeah I heard Phil – Grant and me are going out Peggy – Hope its not Johnny’s Phil – Stay out of it Peggy – Ok Honey – I want to work Mrs Mitchell Peggy – If your sure get behind here Scene 19 – Back at the Allen’s Johnny – Your pregnant and keeping it Juley – Why wouldn’t she keep it, we made it Johnny – Too much detail There’s a knock at the door Juley – I’ll get it Johnny – No I’ll get it Johnny opens the door Johnny – O the Beetroot twins, come in. Phil – There’s my granddad Johnny – Is that the best you can come up with Grant – Were coming in Johnny – O no your not Phil – this aint panto granddad Juley – Were going to go Mr Allen Johnny – Ruby go on Ruby walks out onto the square and Johnny slams the door Johnny shakes Juleys hand Johnny – you better look after her Juley – I will now I’m going Juley leaves Phil – now we need to talk Grant starts rummaging in the drawers and finds Johnny’s gun Grant – Phil He throws the gun to Phil who catches it and points the gun at Johnny Phil – Now Mr Allen you are going to leave Walford here’s your choices Willing lay or in a coffin Johnny – you aint got the guts Grant knocks a vase onto the floor by accident Phil jumps and accidentally shoots the Gun it hits Johnny and he falls to the floor Grant – That was an accident right Phil – We need to go now They walk out the house Scene 20 – In the pub and Pauline and Joe walk in All – Cheer Pauline – O don’t Garry, Naomi, Oliver, Belinda, Pat, Sharon and Billy are standing by the bar, Honeys behind the bar. Billy – Pat me and Honey are engaged Pat – Bit of Advice Honey, Run, Run and Run Fast Billy – Oi Garry – If things don’t work out you can always come and find us. Naomi – Oi you your worse than Billy Oliver – Billy did you even remember the ring Billy – Of Course Belinda – well I’m going over there before he kicks off Sharon – Well I’m happy for you bill and you honey At the other side of the bar Lil Mo’s behind the bar Charlie, Belinda and Stacey at the other side Lil Mo – I phoned Lynne today Belinda – That’s nice for you Lil Mo – I’m going to Live with her Stacey – Your leaving Walford Belinda – Well Noticed Sherlock Charlie – When Lil Mo – Tonight Charlie – Tonight Lil Mo - after work Stacey – Look at the bright side Freddie wont be keeping me awake all night now. Charlie – Stacey Phil and Grant walk back in and go in the back Carly walks over to Stacey Carly – Have you seen deano today Stacey – No why Carly – He and dad had a row and he went out and never came back Stacey – I’ll go and look for him, anything’s better than this bore fest Stacey leaves the pub Scene 21 – Upstairs in the Vic Phil – I’m going to leave Walford Grant – Are you sure Phil – Yeah Grant – When Phil – Get Mum and Billy to the tube at 8 Scene 22 Back in the Vic Grace and Kevin are sitting in a booth. Grace – Do you like me Kevin – Of course Grace – No do you really like me Kevin – no I really, really, really like you no actually I love you Grace – Can you take me home then Kevin – Ok babe Grace – This wedding is boring, I’ll cook you dinner darling. They get up and run out the pub Scene 23 – Stacey walks into the allotments Deano’s sitting on the bench Stacey – I found you then Deano – Hi to you to Stacey – Don’t use that attitude on me, so is this all about that row with your Dad Deano – well em Yes Stacey – What Deano – What Stacey – You said well Deano – just leave it Stacey – No I wont just leave it, tell me Deano – Just leave it can I have a hug Stacey goes to hug him and then goes to kiss him instead but he rejects it Stacey – What you doing Deano – That’s the well Stacey – explain Deano – I’m, em Stacey – spit it out Deano – I’m gay you happy now, you cant tell anybody Stacey – Why you shouldn’t be ashamed Deano – I’m not ashamed Stacey – Well what then Deano – Just leave it Deano walks off Stacey – Blimey Scene 24 – Back in the Vic, someone walks in the door Steven – Hi dad Ian turns towards the door Ian – Steven Peter – bro Steven – Alright Peter, Lucy and Jane – Jane Steven – All Ian’s Latest, aunt Pauline Pauline – Steven Stacey walks in and stands next to Ruby Stacey – (To ruby) I like, I like what I see. Scene 25 – Keith walks into Minty’s bedroom, Minty’s in bed Keith – you felling any better mate Minty – Am I going to crazy or can I smell gas Keith – Yeah its really strong, well I’ll make you something to eat Minty – Great Keith leaves the room Scene 26 – The camera is on the square looking at the allens house and at Mintys flat a car starts to drive pass and the block explodes and the car is tossed across the square Ian comes out of the Vic and runs back in Scene 27 – Back inside the Vic Ian – Phone the emergency services there’s been an explosion Ruby get onto the square, Garry your flats alight Garry – What Ruby, Stacey, Juley, Garry, Naomi, The Millers go onto the square Ian – everyone else stay in here its safer Scene 28 – On the square Ruby falls to her knees in tears Garry – Mints (tear in his eye) Naomi – It’ll be ok gaz Rosie lies in tears in the street Dawn – Mum Demi – Dad Darren – Dems don’t Mickey – I’ll take the kids home mum Dawn – that’s great Mike Mickey – don’t call me that Dawn – what Mickey – Mike my name is Mickey, come on Kids Mickey, Demi and Darren go over to the millers Scene 29 – In the Vic Peggy – that’s you finished Mo Lil Mo – Good Everyone (Shouts) Shush, I just want to say bye as I’m going across the road then I’m leaving Walford Billy – Mo is this about me and stuff Lil Mo – Do you know what, not everything revolves around you Billy you really are a loser aren’t you. Billy – what’s got into you? Lil Mo – I’m standing up for my self Oliver – maybe you should sit down because that was rather harsh Honey – it was a bit harsh Lil Mo – your welcome to that loser Charlie – Mo be quite at One point you loved him Lil Mo – Sorry Billy but I’m having a bad day Billy – I will miss you Lil Mo – I will always love you Billy no matter what She walks out followed by Charlie, Big Mo and Belinda Scene 30 – At the Millers Ryan – Keith’s dead Mickey – yeah and it’s all your fault Ryan – I never started the fire Mickey – No but you made him move over there. Mickey storms out the room Scene 31 – Back in the pub someone puts there hand on Sonia’s shoulder Sonia turns to see who it is Sonia – Billy Billy – alright sis Jim – Good to see you son Billy – can I stay for a few days Dot – Of course you can Barry and Lauren King walk in Barry – Hi darlin Peggy – Hi Honey Lauren – Your busy I see Peggy – Pauline and Joe’s Wedding Barry – O yes Scene 32 – At the Slater’s Big Mo – You all packed Lil Mo – Yip Big Mo – Every little thing Stacey walks in Stacey – There’s a taxi outside, It’s for you Mo are you leaving right now Lil Mo – yeah A car horn goes Lil mo – I better hurry up Big Mo – I’ll miss you darlin Belinda – Love you sis Stacey – See you Charlie – You’re my little girl and always will be and you know there’s always going to be a home here for you Lil Mo – I know Charlie – Bye darlin Lil Mo – please don’t come out, lets go then Freddie say bye bye Freddie – Bye Lil Mo – Bye Guys Scene 33 – In the Vic Grant – Mum, Billy you need to come now Peggy – Why Grant – Just do it Peggy – Honey your in charge look after the bar Grant – Carla help honey will you Carla – Ok Grant, Peggy and Billy leave the pub Scene 34 – Back in the slaters Charlie – o Girls Big Mo – It’ll be Ok Stacey – Yeah Scene 35 – Back at the Vic Carla – who’s first Lucy Smith- White wine and a pint of lager Patrick – Pint and red wine and a packet of Salt and Vinegar crisps Carla – I’ll get the crisps She goes into the back Gus – Pint Honey Ron – A pint and white wine a bit quicker please Honey – One at a time so who’s first Patrick, Gus, Ron – Me Honey – Aaa Scene 36 – Outside the tube Grant – where is he Peggy – Who Phil comes up behind them Phil – Me, I’m leaving Mum Peggy – now Billy – You and Mo on the same day Phil – Yes now Billy – well bye mate Grant – bye bruv Peggy – your going Phil – Love you mum Peggy – (as Phil walks away into the station) I love you son Phil – Bye Scene 37 – Back in the Pub Yolande – (shouts) Silence Please Pauline or Joe speech please Pauline – No Joe – I’ll do it then well I don’t know what to say. I just want to Thank you all for coming and to tell you I love Pauline so much and lets raise a toast to the Future All – To the future Colin – here here Scene 38 – Back at the station Peggy – He’s gone Grant – lets go back to the pub Billy – Yeah Scene 39 – Back in the Pub Billy, Peggy and Grant walk back in Sharon – (Shouts) Hush Please, One last interruption until we party into the wee small hours. I just want to say a short speech if you don’t mind Pauline Pauline – Of course not Sharon – Walford has always been my favourite place in the world it’s my home, I may leave but I always return. And one thing that never changes is Pauline. She’s always here in Walford; she’s always there when needed and Is always a great friend to anyone that come cross her. One piece of advice don’t cross her or she’ll get out her frying Pan. Only Kidding but She has changed a lot today she is no more single and has extended her family and I’m glad to say Pauline Congratulations. And what I love about walford is that it’s full of friends and family so lets raise a toast To Friends and Family All – To friends and family Dot – And to Walford All – To Walford Scene 40 – The camera looks at the burnt out block before moving round to the slaters block then round to the truemans then round to the fowlers then round to the Vic as the theme tune starts to play The End! So what do you think |
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How do you know that Diane Parish is going to play Grace Julien or is that bit made up?
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I made it up also
another chacracter I made up Ryan Craig friend of Keiths untill he started an affair with Rosie Kieth's at Garry mintys flat |
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Originally Posted by Chrissy 2005
So what do you think
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Yeah me to I always had a wild imagination
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Chrissy if you enjoy writing you should check out the writers room at BBC.co.uk. Its a great resource and gives tips on writing for Eastenders.
You have your dialogue really well thought out. |
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Thanks alot Polly
This is the first script I've written, but I did prefer the story planing rather than the actual writting |
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That was brilliant
!Maybe EastEnders might get better ratings if you were a scriptwriter!
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Thanks alot chocoholic
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That was great. I really enjoyed reading that. Are you going to write another one or was that just a one off?
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Great talent Crissy, I couldnt script write to save my life! It sounds good to
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Nice work
Chissy 2005 check your PM's
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Thanks for all your lovely comment's I could write the next episode if you want
ps Move over Sarah Phelps here I come lol |
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Originally Posted by Chrissy 2005
Thanks alot Polly
This is the first script I've written, but I did prefer the story planing rather than the actual writting
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That would be great fun Polly, I would like to be in charge at EE or Corrie
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Monday 20th Febuary 8:00
Scene 1 – It’s very early in the morning, Pauline’s sitting on Arthur’s bench, A drunken Sonia, Naomi, Oliver and Gus come staggering up the market. Oliver and Naomi are singing YMCA.
Gus – Where are you staying tonight mate Oliver – Well I was going to sleep in the surgery but just remembered it went up in flames a few hours ago Gus – You where going to sleep in the surgery, no I’ve got a very comfortable sofa If you want it. Oliver – Ta Naomi – There’s your mother in law Sonia Sonia – Ex thank you very much Gus – See you later girls Oliver – bye Sonia – bye Naomi – bye guys Sonia – You go over to the house I’m going to talk to happy chops here Naomi – Good luck you need it Sonia sits down next to Pauline on the bench Naomi goes over to the brannings Sonia – What’s up Pauline, let me guess Joe Pauline – No it’s just I feel Sonia – wow you can feel Pauline – O forget it Pauline stands up and starts to walk across the square Sonia – (Shouts) Sorry Pauline I’m drunk Pauline – It’s Ok Pauline walks off down the market, Sonia walks into the Brannings. Scene 2 – At the Wicks Pat comes out of the Living Room Carly comes down the stairs Carly – Is he back Pat – No I’m just going round to Stacey’s now Kevin and Grace come down the stirs giggling Carly – You do now Deano isn’t back yet and its all your fault Pat – Now come on Carly we’ll go round to Stacey’s Carly – No I’m going to look for him, you go to Stacey’s Grace – What are you on about? Pat – Kevin and Dean had a row and Dean walked out and hasn’t come back Grace – When did you have a row? Pat – Yester Grace – I’m asking Kevin Pat Kevin – Yesterday at breakfast, I tried to take the frying pan off him and he burnt himself Carly – And he called him a pafetic little boy Grace – That was a bit harsh Carly – I’m off Pat – Yeah me to Pat and Carly leave the Wicks Scene 3 – At the Vic Peggy is standing at the Till and Honey is at the other side of the bar cleaning it. Honey – Mrs Mitchell what’s up you’ve had a face like a cow on since you came down this morning, your starting to make me miserable Peggy – It’s my Phil he’s gone Honey – Yeah to the Suppliers Peggy – No that was my cover story Honey – I don’t get it Peggy – He’s left Walford Honey – But he’ll be back right Peggy – I don’t now Honey – At least he can come back my dad’s gone for good Peggy – But there’s something not right Honey Honey – What Peggy – I only discovered he was leaving when I went to the tube station to say goodbye Honey – Your confusing me, I think your worrying over nothing Peggy – Maybe your right Honey – I’m always right (Ha Ha) Scene 4 – At the Slater’s, there’s a knock at the door Charlie comes down the stairs to answer it, Big Mo comes to the Kitchen door to see who it is and as the door opens Stacey starts to come down the Stairs. Charlie – Pat Pat – Is your Stacey there Charlie – yeah Why Pat – Don’t worry she’s not in trouble, O Stacey I never seen you there can I have a word please Stacey – Alright Mo – Watch that one she might try and kidnap you Pat – Watch your mouth Lady Mo – What is it going to do a dance Stacey – O shut up nan and go and make my breakfast, (laughing) Come in Pat Stacey and Pat go into the Living room and shut the door as Bel comes down the stairs Bel – What’s that all about Charlie – Only god knows, I hope she hasn’t been causing trouble Mo – O leave her along Charlie she’s just a kid, Breakfast Bel Bel – No thanks I need my beauty sleep Mo – God, You’d need to be in a coma to make you beautiful Charlie – O you that’s my gal you’re talking about Bel – Well I’d rather be in a come than passed it like you Mo – Cheeky Cow, come here Mo chases Bel up the stairs Scene 5 – In the Slater’s Living Room Pat is sitting on the Sofa, Stacey is standing Pat – Sit is not bad I just need to ask you a few things Stacey sits down Stacey – Ask away Bel – Scream Stacey stands up next to the door and bangs it with her fist Stacey – Shut up will ya? Pat – It’s about Deano Stacey – Yes Pat – Carly told me you went looking for him yesterday Stacey – She told you right Pat – Did you find him, Stacey please tell me the truth (With tear in eye), he never came home last night and I’m so worried Stacey – I did find him Pat - Where is he, is he Ok, what was he planning Stacey – I’m not telling you here, Walls have ears follow me They open the Living room door and Mo and Bel where listening in Stacey – See what I mean Scene 6 – Juley’s bedroom Ruby is in bed Juley walks in with a tray Juley – I made you breakfast again Rubz just talk to me babes Just say something Please Darling Ruby – He’s gone Juley - Yes I now babes Ruby bursts into tears, Juley drops the tray and rushes over to comfort her he hugs her Ruby – He can’t be gone He can’t Juley – He is babes Ruby – (Scream) NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Scene 7 – In the Square Pat and Stacey are sitting on the bench Pat – What is it Stace Stacey – Deano talked to me and he told me something Pat – What is it Stacey – You promise not to tell anyone Pat – This is serious isn’t it? Stacey – Yes do you promise? Pat – I promise Deano – He told me he was Pat – God he doesn’t have HIV does he Stacey – No he’s ….. (She hesitates) Pat – What is it Stacey – He’s Gay Pat – What Stacey – He’s scared about how his dad will react and I’m the first person he told, yesterday I forced it out of him then he stormed off, I don’t think we will see him again, You can’t tell anyone Pat – Yeah Stacey – I mean it Pat Pat – I won’t tell anyone Stacey - Well I need to go and see rubz now Stacey stands up and goes to walk away but Pat says Pat – Stace thanks for telling me, and tell Ruby I’m so sorry about her dad Stacey – Of course see ya Pat sits with confused face as Stacey walks across the square to Juley’s Scene 8 – Carly is sitting at the war memorial she is crying. Mickey rushes up beside her Mickey – What’s up babe? Carly – Deano has done a disappearing act Mickey – He’s left Carly – he’s ran away Mickey – Why Carly – I don’t really now Scene 9 Stacey and Juley are in Juley’s flats Living room Stacey – How is she Juley – terrible man Stacey – Can I go in Juley – Of course Stacey goes into the bedroom Stacey – Hi Rubes Silence Juley – She won’t talk Stace Stacey – I’ll be back in a minute Juley and Stacey go back into the living room Juley – I’m struggling to cope here Stace Stacey – I’ll be back in a minute, I know someone who can help Juley – (As Stacey walks out the flat) Who Scene 10 – At the Millers Rosie is sitting in Keith’s Chair and Dawn walks in Dawn - Don’t do this to yourself Mum Rosie – Do what Dawn – You no what I mean Rosie – I do, Dawn I miss him so much Dawn – Of course you do Dawn and Rosie hug as Demi peeks her head in the door Demi – I’m going out Darren is on the stairs he sees that Demi is upset Darren – I’ll go after her Scene 11 – Juley answers the door to Stacey and Sharon Juley – Sharon Sharon – Where is she Juley – In the bedroom Sharon – That one Juley – No that one Stacey – Come on Juley leave them to it Sharon – Go to the Pub Juley I’ll come and get you later Ok Juley – Ok but phone me if you need me my numbers in Ruby’s phone Sharon – Of course Sharon shuts the door Sharon – Ruby darling It’s me Sharon Can I come in Please Ruby nods her head Sharon – Thanks I now how your feeing Ruby, My dad’s dead, my mum’s dead, my ex boyfriend Tom and then Dennis. You will get through this you now Ruby goes over and hugs Sharon Sharon – It’s going to be Ok Scene 12 In the square Stacey’s sitting on Arthur’s bench, Steven comes up beside her Steven – Anyone sitting there Stacey – Nope unless you are Steven sits down Steven – What’s your name? Stacey – I’m Stacey Steven – I’m Steven Stacey – Your Pats grandson Steven – Yip Stacey – Pat’s ok I like her Steven – Yeah me to, so what’s up? Stacey – Nothing you’re here Steven – Are you trying to chat me up Stacey – Maybe, maybe not Steven – So do you stay round here Stacey – Yeah at the Slater’s over there Steven – O you’re a Slater Stacey – Yip Steven – So what where you thinking about Stacey – My mate Ruby, her dad died in that fire Steven – I’m so sorry Stacey – He was a nasty piece of work Steven – O not the nicest bloke Stacey – You’re a nice bloke Steven – But I can be bad Stacey goes to kiss him but is interrupted by Sharon – Stacey Stacey – What is it? Sharon – It’s Ruby She’s collapsed Steven – I’ll call for an ambulance Sharon – I’ve done it Stacey – Go into the Pub and ask for Juley and tell him to go home Steven runs over to the Pub Scene 13 – Steven runs into the Pub Steven – Mrs Mitchell I need help Peggy – What is it Steven – Who is Juley? Juley – I am Steven – You need to come Juley – Why? Steven – Ruby has collapsed Juley – What, I’m coming Peggy – Honey watch the bar, I’m coming to Juley They all rush out of the Pub Scene 14 – Back at Juley’s Stacey has got a hold of Ruby’s hand Stacey – Come on Ruby don’t give up on me Please Rubz don’t go Sharon – Don’t worry she’ll be OK Stacey – Are you a doctor Sharon – No but Stacey – Well I don’t think you can make that judgement Can you Sharon – Well no but I do have a feeling Stacey – If you don’t have anything useful to say Shut up will you Juley, Steven and Peggy come in the door and July dives down beside her Juley – Please let her and the baby be Ok Stacey – The baby Juley – She’s pregnant Peggy – I think that’s the ambulance Steven – I go and let them in As Steven goes to go out the door Gus rushes in and pushes Steven out the way. Steven then Exit’s the room Gus – What’s going on Peggy – Ruby’s collapsed The paramedics come in Gus pulls Juley away from Ruby and Sharon pulls Stacey away Stacey – Please Ruby Please Juley – Is she going to be Ok Peggy – Excuse me She’s pregnant Paramedic 1 – We need to get her straight to the hospital Scene 15 – In the Vic Garry and Naomi are sitting by the bar, Honeys behind the bar Garry – I miss him Naomi – Minty Garry – Well yeah but I was talking about Bobby Naomi – Who Garry – Sorry, Ian’s baby at one point I thought he was mine Naomi – Ok Honey – Hi Guys Garry – Another drink Naomi – No I need to go to Work Garry – Come on your only drinking Orange Juice Naomi – I need to go Honey – Bye Pint Garry Garry – Bye Yes Honey Naomi – Bye Naomi leaves the pub Scene 16 – In the Market Carly and Mickey are walking up the market. Half way up Carly stops Mickey – What’s up? Carly – Take my hand will you Mickey – Of Course Mickey takes Carlys hand and they walk up the market across the square to the Wicks. Standing on the doorstep Carly – Thanks for cheering me up Mickey Mickey – It’s not a problem Carly – You’re a lovely man Mickey Mickey – Thanks Carly – And a lovely Smile Mickey – Thanks Carly – I really like you Mickey Mickey – I really like you to Carly kisses him When they stop Kissing Mickey – Would you like to go out tonight? Carly – Yes I would Mickey – Good See you later Carly – See you Sexy Scene 17 – At the Hospital Ruby is being rushed along a corridor on a bed with Juley and Stacey following Juley – Will She be Ok Doctor – We need to get her into Surgery now so if you would like to go into the family room Stacey – Come on Juley They let the bed go along the rest of the corridor and Juley and Stacey walk into the family room Scene 18 – In the Fowler’s living room Pauline and Joe are sitting watching TV Pauline – I love you Joe Joe – I love you two darling Pauline – Want to go to the Vic Joe – Ok They get up and leave the fowlers Scene 19 – At the Allotments Demi is sitting on a bench and Darren walks up beside her Darren – I looked everywhere for you Demi – Well you found me Darren – Are you feeling any better Demi – Everyone is just going and leaving me Leo, Dad Darren – I’m still here Demi – O Darren Darren hugs Demi Scene 20 – A doctor enters the Family News Juley – Will you tell me what is going on Doctor – I have news Stacey – What is it Doctor – Ruby will be Ok Juley – Yes Doctor – but we’ve lost the baby Juley bursts into tears Stacey – It will be Ok Dun Dun Dun …………………… |
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Very very good.
Excellent structure and well thought out. Only criticism I have (and it's just my opinion, my two pence worth) is that there is perhaps a bit to much "back and forth" dialogue ("What?" followed by "How?" etc). Pacey and has a nice flow.
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Wow! Fab script Chrissy!
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